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The money spent by governments on space programmes would be better spent on vital public services such as schools and hospitals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The money spent by governments on space programmes would be better spent on vital public services such as schools and hospitals. pqEd
People hold mixed views about whether or not the government should fund space exploration programmes. while i believe that important public sectors like education and health should have the priority for funding, i would also argue that space programmes had a significant benefits on some aspects of our life. on the one hand, there are some reasons whey subsidising space programmes by the state considered to be a good idea. perhaps the main one is the fact that sending man to the moon was a great achievement in human life that still inspire people particularly scientist. It indicate that they can achieve any thing they put their minds to. Also exploring the space has opened the door for some incredible possibilities, for example, finding other energy sources in the space that could be a solution to the energy problems on earth. This possibilities could help to serve humanity in the long run. Furthermore, at the moment many countries and governments are already using space technology to serve their people by providing weather forecast which is an amazing service. On the other hand, there are also good arguments against funding space exploration. One is that basically space programmes are not providing any vital services and in fact we could live happily without them. Also it did not benefited us practically in terms of education and health, where still many people in different places of the world suffer from serious health problems and lack of basic education. It would have been better if this funds was spent on the vital services that has direct benefit to the people. In addition there are thousands of people even in most developed countries who are homeless and do not have proper food, so it is a pity for this countries like the USA to just ignore them and look for less essential things like the space. In conclusion, It is almost certainly true that we have some important public services that need to be first looked at, however it is also true that space programmes might be a solution to many problems present at earth, so i suggest that any government should prioritise funding according to their population need.
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hold mixed views about
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whether or not
the
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government
should fund
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space
exploration
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programmes
.
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while
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i
believe that
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important
public sectors like education and health should have the priority for funding,
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i
would
also
argue that
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space
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programmes
had a significant
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benefits
on
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some
aspects of our life.

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on
the one hand, there are
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some
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reasons
whey
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subsidising
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space
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programmes
by the state considered to be a
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good
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idea
.
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perhaps
the main one is the fact that sending
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man
to the moon was a great achievement in human life that
still
inspire
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people
particularly
scientist. It
Did you mean "indicates"?
indicate
that they can achieve
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any thing
they put their minds to.
Also
exploring the
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space
has opened the door for
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some
incredible possibilities,
for example
, finding other energy sources in the
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space
that could be a solution to the energy problems on earth.
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This
possibilities could
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help
to serve humanity in the long run.
Furthermore
, at the moment
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many
countries and
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governments
are already using
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space
technology to serve their
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people
by providing weather forecast which is an amazing service.

On the other hand
, there are
also
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good
arguments against funding
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space
exploration. One is that
basically
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space
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programmes
are not providing any vital services and in fact we could
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live
happily
without them.
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Also
it did not
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benefited
us
practically
in terms of education and health, where
still
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many
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people
in
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different
places of the world suffer from serious health problems and lack of basic education. It would have been better if this funds
was spent
on the vital services that has direct benefit to the
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people
. In
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addition
there are thousands of
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people
even in most
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developed countries
who are homeless and do not have proper food,
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so
it is a pity for this countries like the USA to
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just
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ignore
them and look for less essential things like the space.

In conclusion
, It is almost
certainly
true that we have
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some
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important
public services that need to be
first
looked at,
however
it is
also
true that
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space
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programmes
might be a solution to
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many
problems present at earth,
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so
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i
suggest that any
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government
should
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prioritise
funding according to their population need.
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IELTS essay The money spent by governments on space programmes would be better spent on vital public services such as schools and hospitals.

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