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The increase in mobile phone use in recent years has transformed the way we live, communicate and do business. Mobile phones can also be the cause of social or medical problems. What forms do these problems take? Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages of mobile phones?

Benefits and disadvantages of mobile phones: Mobile Phones have transformed nearly everyone’s lives in last few years. Mobile phones have made communication much easier and cheaper. Once can communicate with their friends and loved ones in few seconds. Moreover, the technologies like video calls and direct messenger applications have enhanced the user experience and makes it feel like in person meeting. As every coin has two sides, even mobile phones have their disadvantages. This essay focuses on covering both the aspects. Communication has become much easier nowadays because of mobile phones. This has also helped in businesses. One can have their business not only in different city but also across in different country. Nowadays, mobile phones are also the used for payments. Also, the smart phones can have mostly all applications which a laptop or computer can have. In fact, people often prefer using mobile phones now. The other advantage of having mobile phones is that it is handy and it can be used for entertainment too. For instance, one can enjoy playing games and listening songs. In addition, we can access emails and other essential applications which are essential for business, education and other purpose. However, there are many disadvantages of mobile phones. One is potential health risk. While the information is not confirm some people living near mobile transmitters report higher rate of cancer rates. And, keeping mobile phones near ear for longer hour of time may be harmful to users. Also, Mobile phones may be responsible for making people antisocial as many times the person glued to phone ignores other people who are front of them. I personally believe that mobile phones have made everyone’s life convenient and also in future it will enhance the communication with the new technologies. But, an individual should also keep cons in their mind and limit the use of mobile phones such that they minimize the health risks.
Benefits and disadvantages of mobile phones:

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have transformed
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everyone’s
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lives
in last few years. Mobile
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phones
have made communication much easier and cheaper. Once can communicate with their friends and
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loved
ones in few seconds.
Moreover
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makes
it feel like in person meeting. As every coin has two sides, even mobile
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phones
have their disadvantages. This essay focuses on covering both the aspects.

Communication has become much easier nowadays
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because
of mobile
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phones
. This has
also
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helped
in businesses. One can have their business not
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different
city
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also
across in
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country. Nowadays, mobile
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are
also
the
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used
for payments.
Also
, the smart
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phones
can have
mostly
all applications which a laptop or computer can have. In fact,
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people
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prefer using mobile
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phones
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. The
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advantage of having mobile
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phones
is that it is handy and it can be
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used
for entertainment too.
For instance
, one can enjoy playing games and listening songs.
In addition
, we can access emails and
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other
essential applications which are essential for business, education and
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other
purpose.

However
, there are
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many
disadvantages of mobile
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phones
. One is potential health
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risk
.
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confirm
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some
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people
living near mobile transmitters report higher rate of cancer rates. And, keeping mobile
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phones
near ear for longer hour of time may be harmful to users.
Also
, Mobile
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phones
may be responsible for making
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people
antisocial as
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many
times the person glued to
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phone
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ignores
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other
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people
who are front of them.

I
personally
believe that mobile
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phones
have made everyone’s life convenient and
also
in future it will enhance the communication with the new technologies.
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But
, an individual should
also
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keep
cons in their mind and limit the
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use
of mobile
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phones
such that they minimize the health
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risks
.
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IELTS essay The increase in mobile phone use in recent years has transformed the way we live, communicate and do business. Mobile phones can also be the cause of social or medical problems. What forms do these problems take? Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages of mobile phones?

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
317 words
6.0
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