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The idea of space travel is fantastic these days and scientists are very fascinated towards it. However, there are many environmental problems in our planet that we should resolve first before considering space travel that would cost a significant sum. Wh v.2

The idea of space travel is fantastic these days and scientists are very fascinated towards it. However, there are many environmental problems in our planet that we should resolve first before considering space travel that would cost a significant sum. Wh v. 2
In this days, traveling to space is an imaginary opinion and scientists are very fascinated toward it. Although this idea is great, the environmental issues in the earth are more important and at first, we should release it of these problems before thinking about space traveling. For the purpose of this essay, I would analyze some of the environmental problems. To begin with, there are various reasons to dismiss the idea of space traveling, if we did have not solved the environmental issues on our planet. At first, the impacts of the greenhouse gases have not resolved after a long period of their appearance. The governments must to spent costs in regard to providing facilities that could clean the effects of greenhouse gases from the earth. For example, working to increase the public transportation equipment and encouraging people to use the public vehicles is the task of government in this case. In addition, there are many people on our planet that have not an ability to feeding. The sense of philanthropic says we should think about the hungry people before spending money to travel to space. For instance, a recent research conducted by MYT University researchers in 2016 shows that a significant number of people in African countries such as Namibia and Ethiopia need to help from wealthy countries to fulfill the costs of treating their patients and feeding the hungry people. In conclusion, while there are several compelling arguments about the space traveling, I profoundly believe that the environmental problems are threatening all living creatures on the earth and resolving these issues is vital before this fantastic traveling.
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this days
, traveling to
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is an imaginary opinion and scientists are
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fascinated toward it.

Although this
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idea
is great, the
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environmental
issues in the earth are more
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important
and at
first
, we should release it of these problems
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before
thinking about
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space
traveling. For the purpose of this essay, I would analyze
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some of the
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environmental
problems.

To
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begin
with, there are various reasons to dismiss the
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idea
of
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space
traveling, if we did have not solved the
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environmental
issues on our planet. At
first
, the impacts of the greenhouse gases have not resolved after a long period of their appearance. The
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governments
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must
to spent costs in regard to providing facilities that could clean the effects of greenhouse gases from the earth.
For example
, working to increase the public transportation equipment and encouraging
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people
to
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use
the public vehicles is the task of
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government
in this case
.

In addition
, there are
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many
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people
on our planet that have not an ability to feeding. The sense of philanthropic says we should
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think
about the hungry
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people
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before
spending money to travel to
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space
.
For instance
, a recent research conducted by
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MYT
University researchers in 2016
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shows
that a significant number of
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people
in African countries such as Namibia and Ethiopia need to
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help
from wealthy countries to fulfill the costs of treating their patients and feeding the hungry
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people
.

In conclusion
, while there are several compelling arguments about the
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space
traveling, I
profoundly
believe that the
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environmental
problems are threatening all living creatures on the earth and resolving these issues is vital
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before
this fantastic traveling.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
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3Mistakes

IELTS essay The idea of space travel is fantastic these days and scientists are very fascinated towards it. However, there are many environmental problems in our planet that we should resolve first before considering space travel that would cost a significant sum. Wh v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
269 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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