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The given line graph illustrates the amount of the changes in fast food consumed by teenagers in Australia between 1975 and 2000.

The given line graph illustrates the amount of the changes in fast food consumed by teenagers in Australia between 1975 and 2000. Units are measured in the number of times eaten per year. Overall, it can clearly be seen that the highest consumed food in the first year decreased steadily whereas the other two foods with the lowest number rose significantly throughout the given period. Moreover, while the consumption of fish and chip was the highest in the beginning, it had been overtaken by hamburgers by the end of the period. In terms of the food with the highest number of consumption in the beginning, the consumption of fish and chips stood at precisely 100 in 1975. Then, it experienced a slight decrease to nearly 80 in 1980, before rising to around 90. From this point onwards, the figure dropped gradually and hit a trough at just below 40 in 2000. Regarding the other types of food consumptions with low levels at the start, the figures for pizza and hamburgers stood far lower than fish and chips at approximately 10 and 15, respectively. The consumption of hamburgers inclined significantly and reached a peak of exactly 100 between 1975 and 1995, thus surpassing fish and chips. Similarly, the figure for pizza experienced a drastic increase to roughly 85 in the same period. Thereafter, both figures remained steady until 2000.
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changes
in
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fast
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food
consumed by
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teenagers
in Australia between 1975 and 2000. Units
are measured
in the number of times eaten per year.

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, it can
clearly
be
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seen
that the highest consumed
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food
in the
first
year decreased
steadily
whereas the other two
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foods
with the lowest number rose
significantly
throughout the
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given
period.
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, while the
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consumption
of fish and
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chip
was the highest in the beginning, it had
been overtaken
by hamburgers by the
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end
of the period.

In terms of the
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food
with the highest number of
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consumption
in the beginning, the
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consumption
of fish and chips stood at
precisely
100 in 1975. Then, it experienced a slight decrease to
nearly
80 in 1980,
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before
rising to around 90. From this point onwards, the
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figure
dropped
gradually
and hit a trough at
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just
below 40 in 2000.

Regarding the other types of
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food
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consumptions
with low levels at the
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start
, the
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figures
for pizza and hamburgers stood far lower than fish and chips at approximately 10 and 15,
respectively
. The
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consumption
of hamburgers inclined
significantly
and reached a peak of exactly 100 between 1975 and 1995,
thus
surpassing fish and chips.
Similarly
, the
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figure
for pizza experienced a drastic increase to roughly 85 in the same period. Thereafter, both
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figures
remained steady until 2000.
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IELTS essay The given line graph illustrates the amount of the changes in fast food consumed by teenagers in Australia between 1975 and 2000.

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