In this memo, it is argued that the vice preseident suggests their company should cooperate with Alpha construction company instead of Zeta for the new building plan. The atuhor cites several evidence to prove the idea. Firstly, there were more expense of the buliding which the Zeta compnay built for the author's company than the Alpha did ten years ago both. Secondly, the mantainance of the building that Zeta constructed was twice as much as that Alpha built. Moreover, the energy consumption of the Zeta buliding was higher than Alpha's annually. Besides, the workforce is comparably stable in Alpha. However, the suggestion is probelmatic in that there are some loopholes in it. Also, more evidence of the background of the two bulidings and companies are needed to evaluate the conclusion. Let's reeaxmine the m carefully.
To begin with, the author does not expel the influence of the location which may cause various difference of the restults. As the two bulidings are located in two different places, there may be lots of local conditions different from each other. As the atuhor tells us there were more expense on the buliding erected by Zeta, the author does not tell us whether the other buliding conditions are identical with the Alpha buliding in the other palces. Thus we could not make the conclsuion that the Zeta compnay cost more merely on the construction consumption. As there maybe different price of the buliding materials and laborforces. The atuhor should mak more survey about these expense instead of focusing on the money the afford to the buliding company. Likewise, the more mantainace and energey consumption are not convincing to prove the Zeta company would cost the atuhor's company in that there are other facts except for the bulding company could affect these expense. Also, the atuhor does not show us obvious connections with the fees and the buliding companies.
In addtion, the time has passed ten years. While in this statement, the atuhor makes the advice with the pre-incidence that there have been no changes with the wtwo companies for ten years. In fact, whether there some changes taken place in these companies is still in question. So we need more evidence to prove the author's pre-incidence or more data from specific survey.
Finally, the author argues that a company with little employee quited is a stable, and the atuhor contends this compnay is better than the companies with lots of employee jumped into other companies. While this assumption is not convicing in that there may be other reasons for the frequent workforce transefer in such companies, as well as the companies with stable workforce. There is a hgih possiblity that with more empolyees in and out, the Alpha company is suprior to the Zeta in that Alpha could recruit more fresh blood who could be more creative and efficient. The Zeta company, on the other hand, could have fewer workers who would not compete with the new employees in Alpha. After all, ten years with less employee turnover, the company could not be a promising one.
In conclusion, there are more data and evidence needed to prove the author's suggestion. The vice president should make more survey.
In this memo, it
is argued
that the vice
preseident
suggests their
company
should cooperate with Alpha construction
company
instead
of Zeta for the new building plan. The
atuhor
cites several
evidence
to
prove
the
idea
.
Firstly
, there were more
expense
of the
buliding
which the Zeta
compnay
built for the author's
company
than the Alpha did ten years ago both.
Secondly
, the
mantainance
of the building that Zeta constructed was twice as much as that Alpha built.
Moreover
, the energy consumption of the Zeta
buliding
was higher than Alpha's
annually
.
Besides
, the workforce is
comparably
stable in Alpha.
However
, the suggestion is
probelmatic
in that there are
some
loopholes in it.
Also
, more
evidence
of the background of the two
bulidings
and
companies
are needed
to evaluate the conclusion.
Let's
reeaxmine
the m
carefully
.
To
begin
with, the author does not expel the influence of the location which may cause various difference of the
restults
. As the two
bulidings
are located
in two
different
places, there may be lots of local conditions
different
from each
other
. As the
atuhor
tells
us there were more
expense
on the
buliding
erected by Zeta, the author does not
tell
us whether the
other
buliding
conditions are identical with the Alpha
buliding
in the
other
palces
.
Thus
we could not
make
the
conclsuion
that the Zeta
compnay
cost more
merely
on the construction consumption. As there maybe
different
price of the
buliding
materials and
laborforces
. The
atuhor
should
mak
more survey about these
expense
instead
of focusing on the money
the afford
to the
buliding
company
.
Likewise
, the more
mantainace
and
energey
consumption are not convincing to
prove
the Zeta
company
would cost the
atuhor
's
company
in that there are
other
facts
except for
the
bulding
company
could affect these
expense
.
Also
, the
atuhor
does not
show
us obvious connections with the fees and the
buliding
companies
.
In
addtion
, the time has passed ten years. While in this statement, the
atuhor
makes
the advice with the
pre-incidence
that there have been no
changes
with the
wtwo
companies
for ten years. In fact, whether there
some
changes
taken place in these
companies
is
still
in question.
So
we need more
evidence
to
prove
the author's
pre-incidence
or more data from specific survey.
Finally
, the author argues that a
company
with
little
employee
quited
is a stable, and the
atuhor
contends this
compnay
is better than the
companies
with lots of
employee
jumped into
other
companies
. While this assumption is not
convicing
in that there may be
other
reasons for the frequent workforce
transefer
in such
companies
,
as well
as the
companies
with stable workforce. There is a
hgih
possiblity
that with more
empolyees
in and out, the Alpha
company
is
suprior
to the Zeta in that Alpha could recruit more fresh blood who could be more creative and efficient. The Zeta
company
, on the
other
hand, could have fewer workers who would not compete with the new
employees
in Alpha.
After all
, ten years with less
employee
turnover, the
company
could not be a promising one.
In conclusion
, there are more data and
evidence
needed to
prove
the author's suggestion. The vice president should
make
more survey.