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The Development Of Tourism Contributed To English Becoming The Most Prominent Language In The World v.13

The Development Of Tourism Contributed To English Becoming The Most Prominent Language In The World v. 13
As per capita income of the world has been at its highest in the last decade, more travelers are visiting various tourist destinations than ever before. With this there is a growing perception that eventually English will become the only spoken language globally. Although it is true that when English becomes a common language we will have a much closer and understanding international community, it would certainly be at the expense of smaller indigenous people and their languages. Even though English is currently used for communication in most countries, there is still a wide disparity between the number of people who speak it and those who don’t. People native to South America or China still like to communicate in their local languages and possess little or no knowledge of English. If English becomes the primary language all over the globe, then it would certainly reduce the communication barrier between nations. With better understanding, more and more visitors would be willing to visit these countries and hence it can prove to be a boon for the local tourism industry. For example, countries like China and South Korea have been seeing significant fall in their annual tourism with tourists complaining that most common services like hotels, road signs and maps are not bilingual. On the other hand, electing English as the only spoken language around the world would certainly prove a threat to small cultures around the world, especially indigenous communities. Already one can witness that there are many tribes which are disconnected from the world, and if English were to become the main language, it would push those groups further away. If there is no support provided to market their local language and culture, their heritage would fade away by lack of visits from tourists. For instance, many small tribes living in Peru and islands of Japan see a lot of visitors who are very curious of their old and rich history. In conclusion, with more and more tourists visiting various cultures and places, the rationale behind making English as a global language will only get stronger. This might prove effective in removing misunderstandings and communication barriers among the global community, but the cost of endangering future of indigenous communities is simply too high to pay.
As per capita income of the
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world
has been at its highest in the last decade, more travelers are visiting various
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tourist
destinations than ever
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. With this there is a growing perception that
eventually
English will
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become
the
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only
spoken
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language
globally. Although it is true that when English
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becomes
a common
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language
we will have a much closer and understanding international
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community
, it would
certainly
be at the expense of smaller indigenous
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people
and their languages.

Even though
English is
currently
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used
for communication in most countries, there is
still
a wide disparity between the number of
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people
who speak it and those who don’t.
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People
native to South America or China
still
like to communicate in their local
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languages
and possess
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little
or no knowledge of English. If English
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becomes
the primary
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language
all over the globe, then it would
certainly
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reduce
the communication barrier between nations. With better understanding, more and more visitors would be willing to visit these countries and
hence
it can prove to be a boon for the local tourism industry.
For example
, countries like China and South Korea have been seeing significant fall in their annual tourism with
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tourists
complaining that most common services like hotels, road signs and maps are not bilingual.

On the other hand
, electing English as the
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only
spoken
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language
around the
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world
would
certainly
prove a threat to
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small
cultures around the
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world
,
especially
indigenous
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communities
. Already one can witness that there are
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many
tribes which
are disconnected
from the
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world
, and if English were to
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become
the main
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language
, it would push those groups
further
away. If there is no support provided to market their local
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language
and culture, their heritage would fade away by lack of visits from
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tourists
.
For instance
,
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many
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small
tribes living in Peru and islands of Japan
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see
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a lot of
visitors who are
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very
curious of their
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old
and rich history.

In conclusion
, with more and more
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tourists
visiting various cultures and places, the rationale behind making English as a global
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language
will
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only
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get
stronger. This might prove effective in removing misunderstandings and communication barriers among the global
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community
,
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but
the cost of endangering future of indigenous
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communities
is
simply
too high to pay.
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IELTS essay The Development Of Tourism Contributed To English Becoming The Most Prominent Language In The World v. 13

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
375 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
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