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The crime rate nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advance technology which can prevent and solve crime. Do you agree or disagree?

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The crime rate nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advance technology which can prevent and solve crime do you agree or disagree? It cannot be denied fact the fact that technology has revolutionized world with leaps and bounds in today world crime rate. In today world crime is reducing as compared to the previous years in my opinion illegal activities had decreased at some rate. I partially agree with school of thought this essay will discuss whole scenario in detail before portraying any relevant conclusion To commence with, there are multiple reasons to support my notion firstly, crime had been reduce with the help electronic gadgets for example, as compared to past nowadays C. C. T. V cameras are available for security like in big business, bank and other place cameras are available. secondly, government had also enact some straight law for for criminal activities for instance, government enact rules like to reduce pollution, to control illegal activities and for corruption. finally in previous year people were less educated but today masses are well qualified And also bring invention to improve more in education system. On other hand, with the help of technology criminal activities had been increasing first and foremost, government are promoting to movies which is related to crime and today are watching these types of movies and following this same trend for example, they use to commit murders, robbery and addicted to drugs and other illegal activities. secondly, People are using some many social sites like Facebook, WhatsApp and offenders use to hack their personal information and they get chance to commit crime. so, government should take some straight step against criminals activities In conclusion; in my opinion criminal has increased at alarming rate with the help of technology people use their gadgets in crimes so government should in to provide social and also proper education.
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nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advance
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technology
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prevent
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crime
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or disagree?

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technology
has revolutionized world with leaps and bounds in
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today
world
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crime
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. In
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world
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crime
is reducing as compared to the previous years in my opinion illegal
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activities
had decreased at
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rate
. I
partially
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with school of
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before
portraying any relevant
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conclusion


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firstly
,
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crime
had been
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with the
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help
electronic gadgets
for example
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business, bank and other place cameras are available.
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secondly
,
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government
had
also
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some
straight law
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for for
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criminal
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activities
for instance
,
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government
enact
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rules
like to
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reduce
pollution, to control illegal
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activities
and for corruption.
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finally
in previous year
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people
were less educated
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today
masses are well qualified And
also
bring invention to
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improve
more in education system.

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help
of
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technology
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criminal
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activities
had been increasing
first
and foremost,
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government
are promoting to movies which
is related
to
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crime
and
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today
are watching these types of movies and following this same trend
for example
, they
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commit murders, robbery and addicted to drugs and other illegal
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.
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secondly
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People
are using
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social sites like Facebook, WhatsApp and offenders
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use to
hack their personal
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information and
they
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chance to commit
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crime
.
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so
,
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government
should take
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straight
step against
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criminals
activities

In conclusion
; in my opinion
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criminal
has increased at alarming
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rate
with the
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help
of
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technology
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people
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use
their gadgets in
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crimes
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so
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government
should in to provide social and
also
proper education.
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IELTS essay The crime rate nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advance technology which can prevent and solve crime.

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  American English
6 paragraphs
312 words
5.5
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