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The education you receive from your family is more important than the education you receive from school. To what extent do you agree with this statement and why?

The education you receive from your family is more important than the education you receive from school. PVEXX
Eclucation is a most powerful weapon in the world which can change the world. The education which one acquire from parents is most significant rather than school education. I agree this statement due to some reasons which will be explained in upcoming paragraphs. Apparently, those education are very substantial which obtain by current, Numerous thing collect from kin. Everything learn from family since birth to till end. Walking, speaking, house obiligations, eating, education, behaviour against others its get from parents. It education play significant role in life instead of others folks, family educate to their children for moving forward as well as gives good habit. Every children make superior against of others, Parents education and through of them children achieve sucess in their life for instance, A survery was conducted that most of countless children are educated and at the top position in their career through of kin education. In additionally, school education is also important for everyone. School provides top level education to childeen, Because of this I pupil can achieve anything in their life. They completed their dreams, with the help of school education childhen entire in any field for work. They learn any language, employment. It increase students knowledge about new things which are develop in the world. For instance, Dr. A. P. J Abdul Kalam was educated person who played a leading role in politices and development a missile and nuclear weapens. In conclusion, both education are necessory for us. Both education play important role in our life while family education play big impact role in school life.
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is a most powerful weapon

in the world which can
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change
the world. The
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education
which one acquire

from parents is most significant
rather
than
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school
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education
. I
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agree
this statement due to
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some
reasons which will be
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explained
in upcoming paragraphs.

Apparently
, those
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education
are
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very
substantial which obtain by
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current
, Numerous thing collect from kin. Everything learn from family since birth to till
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end
. Walking, speaking,
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house
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obiligations
, eating,
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education
,
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behaviour
against others its
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get
from parents.
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It
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education
play significant
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role
in
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life
instead
of others folks, family educate to their
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children
for moving forward
as well
as gives
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good
habit.
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Every
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children
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make
superior against of others, Parents
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education
and through of them
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children
achieve
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sucess
in their
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life
for

instance, A
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survery
was conducted
that most of countless
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children
are educated
and at the top position in

their career through of kin education.

In
additionally
,
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school
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education
is
also
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important
for everyone.
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School
provides

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top level
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education
to
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childeen
,
Because of this
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I pupil
can achieve anything in their life.

They completed their dreams, with the
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help
of
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school
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education
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childhen
entire in any field for work. They learn any language, employment. It
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increase


students knowledge about new things which are
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develop
in the world.

For instance
, Dr. A. P. J Abdul
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Kalam
was educated
person who played a leading
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role
in
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politices
and development a missile and nuclear
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weapens
.

In conclusion
, both
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education
are
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necessory


for us. Both
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education
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play
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important
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role
in our
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life
while family
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education
play
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big
impact
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role
in
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school
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life
.
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IELTS essay The education you receive from your family is more important than the education you receive from school.

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
262 words
6.0
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