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The cost of living is higher in many countries. What are the effects of higher prices to individuals and society? What is the best way for people to deal with this problem? v.1

The cost of living is higher in many countries. What are the effects of higher prices to individuals and society? What is the best way for people to deal with this problem? v. 1
While it is wildly known that we can learn a great share of lessons from the past and apply it to our present, some people argue that we cannot learn anything from our history. In this essay I will be sitting on the fence and I will discuss both viewpoints. On the one hand, there are various examples of repetitive situations that happened in history and still occur today. A great example of this phenomena is the election of a supreme. In our lives we usually avoid voting for a president that has radical and fascist views, because we have seen what had been done to countries that did such as Germany and Italy. Moreover, history proves to be a vital source to trace medical hazards to their origins, thus finding a cure. Furthermore, Dr. John Snow, a famous doctor in the 19th century who is the father of epidemiology, was able to trace back the London cholera outbreak to its origin and minimize its occurrence through his research into previous epidemics in history. On the other hand, some oppose history as a trustworthy source to understand our lives simply because history is written by the winner. In other words, when reading history, you are seeing the past through the eyes of the writer, which tends to be biased towards the winner in most cases. One can clearly observe this situation when reading the history of Justinian, the first. Furthermore, it can be noted that Procopius the writer of Justinian I, had two different depictions of Justinian in his different books. Had not we found his hidden book, we would have followed the path of Justinian as a role model for all ambitious leaders. To conclude, although history can have some disadvantages, I believe that those problems can be avoided or rectified by taking a closer look into the lives of historians. Therefore, leaving us with vital information to better understand our lives and avoid possible inadvisable choices.
While it is
wildly
known that we can learn a great share of lessons from the past and apply it to our present,
some
people
argue that we cannot learn anything from our
history
. In this essay I will be sitting on the fence and I will discuss both viewpoints.

On the one hand, there are various examples of repetitive situations that happened in
history
and
still
occur
today
. A great example of
this
phenomena is the election of a supreme. In our
lives
we
usually
avoid voting for a president that has radical and fascist views,
because
we have
seen
what had
been done
to countries that did such as Germany and Italy.
Moreover
,
history
proves to be a vital source to trace medical hazards to their origins,
thus
finding a cure.
Furthermore
, Dr. John Snow, a
famous
doctor in the 19th century who is the father of epidemiology, was able to trace back the London cholera outbreak to its origin and minimize its occurrence through his research into previous epidemics in history.

On the other hand
,
some
oppose
history
as a trustworthy source to understand our
lives
simply
because
history
is written
by the winner.
In other words
, when reading
history
, you are seeing the past through the eyes of the writer, which tends to
be biased
towards the winner
in most cases
. One can
clearly
observe this situation when reading the
history
of Justinian, the
first
.
Furthermore
, it can
be noted
that
Procopius
the writer of Justinian I, had two
different
depictions of Justinian in his
different
books. Had not we found his hidden book, we would have followed the path of Justinian as a role model for all ambitious leaders.

To conclude
, although
history
can have
some
disadvantages, I believe that those problems can
be avoided
or rectified by taking a closer look into the
lives
of historians.
Therefore
, leaving us with vital information to better understand our
lives
and avoid possible inadvisable choices.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay The cost of living is higher in many countries. What are the effects of higher prices to individuals and society? What is the best way for people to deal with this problem? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
328 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
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