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The absence of money leads to unhappiness, but money doesn't bring happiness. what is your opinion?

The absence of money leads to unhappiness, but money doesn't bring happiness. what is your opinion? GM3eL

Money deficiency brings misery but fulfillment of the same does not ensure happiness either. However, In my opinion, they both go hands in hands, where money is absolutely necessary for buying daily goods, as well as can likely be destructive if owned in excessive amounts. This essay will discuss both views in the following paragraphs. On the one hand, not having enough money could cause a person with immense sorrow. As they deprive of essential goods that everyone needs on daily basis.

Money deficiency brings misery This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 fulfillment of the same does not ensure happiness either.

However
, In my opinion, they both go hands in hands, where money is absolutely
 necessary for buying daily This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :productscommoditiesmerchandises
goods
, Probable usage error. Use "and" after 'both'.and
as well as
 can likely be destructive if This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :possessed
owned
 in excessive amounts. This essay will discuss both views in the following paragraphs.

On the one hand, not having This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:abundance
enough
 money could cause a person with immense sorrow. “As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
 they deprive of essential This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :productscommoditiesmerchandises
goods
 that everyone needs on daily basis. 