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Technology is changing many aspects of life and now dominates are home,leisure and work activities what extent do they benefits of it everweigh the disadvantages

Technology is changing many aspects of life and now dominates are home, leisure and work activities what extent do they benefits of it everweigh the disadvantages OMjxp
In present days, Technology has become an integral part of people, s life. It is no denying fact that people are depending more on it. However there are two sides of every coin and on the other hand it has many disadvantages which leads to unhealthy lifestyle and isolation. This essay will discuss the advantages of technology outweigh its disadvantages. The dominance of technology has make life easier of people whereas in old times people had to spend lots of hours for studies and their work but with advancement of technology work can done in seconds. Nowadays internet have give access to numerous resources so people can get every infirmation about their work and as a result they can solve their problem which leads to successful work in their life. Moreover, technology have made the world so small that people can get in touch with anyone from the comfort of their home and also we have information of any of any part of the world. For instance from India even a person can get information what is happening in other country. On the other hand, there are also disadvantages of technology. Firstly it leads to unhealthy lifestyle due to which a person spend whole day in internet a d computers and have no physical activity. for example in present days mostly people are engaged in their mobile phones and they have no time to visit at their friends and relatives house. if people can use technology to a limited extent than it will not give any side effects. There is mo doubt that technology has significant role in people life but due to excessive use of it can bring some negative impacts also so it should be use in limited time period. Due to increasing impact of it a person cannot ignore its advantages because now the life is bound to it and it has more advantages than disadvantages.
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has become an integral part of
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life
. It is no denying fact that
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people
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are depending
more on it.
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on the other hand
it has
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disadvantages which leads to unhealthy lifestyle and isolation. This essay will discuss the advantages of
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technology
outweigh its disadvantages. The dominance of
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technology
has
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make
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life
easier of
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people
whereas in
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old
times
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people
had to spend lots of hours for studies and their
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work
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but
with advancement of
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technology
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work
can
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done
in seconds. Nowadays internet have give access to numerous resources
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people
can
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every
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infirmation
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and
as a result
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work
in their
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life
.
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technology
have made the world
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small
that
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can
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get
in touch with anyone from the comfort of their home and
also
we have information
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of any of any
part of the world.
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from India even a person can
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get
information what is happening in other country.
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, there are
also
disadvantages of
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technology
.
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for
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mostly
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are engaged
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phones and
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.
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if
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use
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technology
to a limited extent than it will not give any side effects. There is mo doubt that
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technology
has significant role in
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people
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life
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but
due to excessive
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use
of it can bring
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ignore
its advantages
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because
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now
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life
is bound
to it and it has more advantages than disadvantages.
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IELTS essay Technology is changing many aspects of life and now dominates are home, leisure and work activities what extent do they benefits of it everweigh the disadvantages

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  American English
1 paragraphs
319 words
5.5
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