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Talk about your classmate

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I think that we all have some classmates that make us remember and I’d like to talk about Minh Ánh, my favourite classmate. We had attend the same class together from 10th grade to 12th grade; she is my tablemate. I met her at our first class in high school and I was impressed by her long straight black hair; it’s so beautiful. Minh Ánh is a tall and thin girl with white skin; I think she looks so pretty. We have the same hobby of reading and we’d like to share our favourite books with each other. She always reads self-help books, short stories… and her favorite author is Nguyễn Nhật Ánh. She is a mature person with a very mature mindset; she is always serious in her work and studies very hard that makes people remember her. She gave me good advice when I met trouble. I think she is someone I trust to share my secrets. If class is a home, Minh Ánh is my sister who I love very much.
I
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think
that we all have
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some
classmates that
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make
us remember and I’d like to talk about
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Minh
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Ánh
, my
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favourite
classmate.

We had
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attend
the same
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class
together from 10th grade to 12th grade; she is my
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tablemate
. I met her at our
first
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class
in high
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school and
I
was impressed
by her long straight black hair; it’s
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so
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beautiful
.
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Minh
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Ánh
is a tall and thin girl with white skin; I
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think
she looks
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so
pretty. We have the same hobby of
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reading and
we’d like to share our
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favourite
books with each other. She always reads self-
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help
books, short stories… and her favorite author is
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Nguyễn
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Nhật
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Ánh
.

She is a mature person with a
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very
mature mindset; she is always serious in her work and studies
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very
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hard
that
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makes
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people
remember her.
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She
gave me
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good
advice when I met trouble. I
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think
she is someone I trust to share my secrets.

If
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class
is a home,
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Minh
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Ánh
is my sister who I
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love
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very
much.
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IELTS essay Talk about your classmate

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
174 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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