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Superpower food -integrated food

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The reading passage presents some supporting points about superpower food, and states that this food provides more energy and prevents humans from many diseases. However, the lecturer argues each of this point and states that there is no scientific evidence that this food actually benefits humans, so people should not trust the research that are not approved scientifically. To begin with, the reading passage states that according to many studies blueberry is superpower food, and it improves the function of brains and motor movements. However, the lecturer states that these studies are done on rats and mice. There is no correlation with humans and mice. This way, we can not trust on this kinds of research, which does not have enough data that proves the effect of this food on humans. Thus, this appears to be a contradiction to the information stated in the reading. In addition, the reading passage states that according to the study, tomatoes and tomato based products are major source of carotenoids and help to reduce cholesterol and treat prostate cancer. However, the lecturer points out that this research is not scientifically proven, and creates misconception among people. They start eating this food in their diet, but this food does not prevent cancer and other disease. Thus, this disputes the point made in the reading passage about tomatoes. Last but not least, the reading passage mentions that broccoli and garlic reduce the cholesterol level in blood. Nevertheless, the lecturer states that according to studies, garlic declined the cholesterol level only for first three months. After that the cholesterol level remained the same in the next six months observation. This directly challenges the assertion stated in the reading passage about garlic and broccoli.
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presents
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supporting
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points
about superpower
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food
, and
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states
that this
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food
provides more energy and
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prevents
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humans
from
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many
diseases.
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, the
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lecturer
argues each of this
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point
and
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states
that there is no scientific evidence that this
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food
actually benefits
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humans
,
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so
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people
should not trust the research that are not approved
scientifically
.

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that according to
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studies
blueberry is superpower
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food
, and it
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improves
the function of brains and motor movements.
However
, the
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lecturer
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states
that these
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studies
are done
on rats and mice. There is no correlation with
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humans
and mice. This way, we can not trust on
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kinds of research, which does not have
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enough
data that proves the effect of this
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food
on
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humans
.
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, this appears to be a contradiction to the information stated in the reading.

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, the
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passage
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states
that according to the
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study
, tomatoes and tomato based products are major source of carotenoids and
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help
to
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reduce
cholesterol and treat prostate cancer.
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, the
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lecturer
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points
out that this research is not
scientifically
proven, and creates misconception among
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people
. They
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start
eating this
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food
in their diet,
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this
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food
does not
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prevent
cancer and other disease.
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, this disputes the
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point
made in the
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about tomatoes.

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mentions that broccoli and garlic
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reduce
the cholesterol level in blood.
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, the
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lecturer
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states
that according to
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studies
, garlic declined the cholesterol level
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only
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three months.
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After
that the cholesterol level remained the same in the
next
six months observation. This
directly
challenges the assertion stated in the
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reading
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passage
about garlic and broccoli.
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IELTS essay Superpower food -integrated food

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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