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Lack of education and employment opportunities are the main causes of the rising crime rate. Some people, therefore, feel that by simply educating prisoners, we can discourage them from committing crimes again after they get released from prison. I totally agree with this view. Almost nobody is born a criminal. Most criminals are victims of circumstances. In fact most of them come from the poor strata of the society and lack education. As a result they don’t have many employment opportunities. Many of them eventually become thieves or gangsters. By contrast, criminal tendencies are comparatively low among educated people. Educating convicted criminals in prison will certainly not erase their shoddy past. However, it improves their chances of finding employment once they get released. One of the biggest problems that ex-prisoners face is the lack of rehabilitation opportunities. The society prefers to keep them at an arm’s length and as such they have fewer opportunities for making a living once they complete their sentence. Unfortunately, this increases their chances of getting into crime again. Education may change the situation for good. If prisoners receive an opportunity to learn and acquire vocational or academic degrees from prison, they are more likely to find employment upon their release. When they have a secure job and a means of living, most people will not want to get into crime again. To conclude, education improves a person’s employability. Just because someone is a prisoner, it does not mean that they cannot learn or acquire degrees. In fact, educating prisoners is one of the best things we can do for their rehabilitation and successful induction into the society.
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employment
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are the main causes of the rising
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crime
rate.
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people
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educating
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prisoners
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crimes
again after they
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get
released from prison. I
totally
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agree
with this view.

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is born
a
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criminal
. Most
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criminals
are victims of circumstances. In fact most of them
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come
from the poor strata of the society and lack education.
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a result they don’t have
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many
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employment
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opportunities
.
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Many
of them
eventually
become thieves or gangsters. By contrast,
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criminal
tendencies are
comparatively
low among educated
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people
.

Educating convicted
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criminals
in prison will
certainly
not erase their shoddy past.
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, it
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improves
their chances of finding
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employment
once they
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get
released. One of the biggest problems that ex-prisoners face is the lack of rehabilitation
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opportunities
. The society prefers to
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keep
them at an arm’s length and as such they have fewer
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opportunities
for making a living once they complete their sentence. Unfortunately, this increases their chances of getting into
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crime
again.

Education may
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change
the situation for
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good
. If
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prisoners
receive an
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opportunity
to learn and acquire vocational or academic degrees from prison, they are more likely to find
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employment
upon their release. When they have a secure job and a means of living, most
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people
will not want to
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get
into
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crime
again.

To conclude
, education
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improves
a person’s employability.
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because
someone is a
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prisoner
, it does not mean that they cannot learn or acquire degrees. In fact, educating
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prisoners
is one of the best things we can do for their rehabilitation and successful induction into the society.
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IELTS essay studies show that education reduces crime

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
272 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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