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Stress related illness what are the causes and solutions?

Stress related illness what are the causes and solutions? pJWND
In recent years, our modern lifestyle has become extremely stressful. This stress can cause various health problems if you don't manage to cope with it. This essay will discuss the factors of this pressure on people and how to tackle this crisis. To commence with the reasons that may cause us some stress. Firstly, unemployment may be a major cause this is due to you should pay for everything in your life so nothing can go without money and work. Secondly, any deadline task can affect our healthy life. For example, exams, study, and work especially children, are easily influenced by anything. Moreover, toxic relationships have a detrimental impact on our mind, body, and spirit. For instance, parents' problems influence on their kids' health. On the other hand, there are some precautions you may easily take to reduce this stress. to illustrate, eating a well balanced diet and doing a bit of regular exercise can help us to mitigate this problem. In addition, schools have recently employed psychologists to offer emotional support to the students as a consequence, they can cope with exams and study stress. Finally, you have to take more leisure time, spend more time taking holidays, and work less overtime as a result, you can relax and rest to cut down on nervousness of our busy lifestyle. To sum up, stress have a negative impact on our health. it can cause a plethora of health problems like diabetes, obesity, and heart disease. However, people has to do some effort to get ride of stressful lifestyle and stay healthy. every one have to learn how to lead a healthy lifestyle.
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extremely
stressful. This
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stress
can
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cause
various health
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problems
if you don't manage to cope with it. This essay will discuss the factors of this pressure on
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people
and how to tackle this crisis.

To commence with the reasons that may
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cause
us
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stress
.
Firstly
, unemployment may be a major
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cause
this is due to you should pay for everything in your life
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so
nothing can go without money and work.
Secondly
, any deadline task can affect our healthy life.
For example
, exams, study, and work
especially
children, are
easily
influenced by anything.
Moreover
, toxic relationships have a detrimental impact on our mind, body, and spirit.
For instance
, parents'
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problems
influence on their kids' health.

On the other hand
, there are
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some
precautions you may
easily
take to
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reduce
this
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stress
.
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to
illustrate, eating a
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well balanced
diet and doing a bit of regular exercise can
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help
us to mitigate this
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problem
.
In addition
, schools have recently employed psychologists to offer emotional support to the students as a consequence, they can cope with exams and study
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stress
.
Finally
, you
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have to
take more leisure time, spend more time taking holidays, and work less overtime
as a result
, you can relax and rest to
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cut
down on nervousness of our busy lifestyle.

To sum up,
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stress
have a
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negative
impact on our health.
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it
can
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cause
a plethora of health
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problems
like diabetes, obesity, and heart disease.
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,
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people
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effort to
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of stressful lifestyle and stay healthy.
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every
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learn how to lead a healthy lifestyle.
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IELTS essay Stress related illness what are the causes and solutions?

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  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
6.0
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