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Some persons believed that browbeaten animals are undoubtedly harsh meanwhile we need to treat them as other human beings like us consequently, we can observe that specific animal required for rendering help that that is undeniable in respect to no other alternative we have like as a substitute for non-vegetarian cuisine as well as for research.

Some persons believed that browbeaten animals are undoubtedly harsh meanwhile we need to treat them as other human beings like us consequently, we can observe that specific animal required for rendering help that that is undeniable in respect to no other alternative we have like as a substitute for non-vegetarian cuisine as well as for research. This essay will discuss an aforesaid topic that certain animals are required in our daily necessities. Some portions of animals are unnecessarily exploited to satisfy person’s needs. To commence with, cows are being exploited without any specific need. This is because a group of people slaughters them for food that is again one of the unlawful practices in some states. For instance, exploitations are banned in various states as the cow in one of the holy animals and provide lots of diary requirement those are essential to meet the physical need to a people. Likewise, horses and donkeys were used in hilly areas as a means of transport. In such a technical upgraded world still, these animals are used as carrying loads which can be replaced with a substitute of any vehicles. As a result, they are beaten by their owner and its shows cruel nature and they often get sick. Certain species are required for scientific research procedures. However, many birds and animals are used for consumption. Due to these, we obscure the need for required protein and carbohydrates from these products which are highly essential for our body. Thus, in colder countries, these are used for food which helps in keeping the body warmer and it is very substantial. Some animals are used for specific research. Any kind of antidote is firstly tried on animals, to see the favorable results whether it is feasible or not, hence for the sake of mankind. Therefore, it is one of the vital factors that cannot be ignored neither we have any substitute. To sum up, to maintain an ecological balance as well as life cycle, some animals are used to meet the requirements of humans that are a debated topic whereas slaughtering is not the only way to overcome this situation. In my opinion, it is absolutely right to use some animals for academia purposes as their existence hardly matters to support the environment.
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animals
are
unnecessarily
exploited to satisfy person’s
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needs
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being exploited
without any specific
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need
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a group of
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people
slaughters them for food
that is
again one of the unlawful practices in
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some
states.
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exploitations
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in various states as the cow in one of the holy
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animals
and provide
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requirement those are essential to
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meet
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need
to a
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people
.
Likewise
, horses and donkeys were
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used
in hilly areas as a means of transport. In such a technical upgraded world
still
, these
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animals
are
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used
as carrying loads which can
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with a substitute of any vehicles.
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are beaten
by their owner and its
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shows
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nature and
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often
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get
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Certain species are
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birds and
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are
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used
for consumption. Due to these, we obscure the
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need
for
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required
protein and carbohydrates from these products which are
highly
essential for our body.
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, in colder countries, these are
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used
for food which
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helps
in keeping the body
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warmer and
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substantial.
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Some
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animals
are
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used
for specific research. Any kind of antidote is
firstly
tried on
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animals
, to
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see
the favorable results whether it is feasible or not,
hence
for the sake of mankind.
Therefore
, it is one of the vital factors that cannot be
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ignored
neither we have any substitute.

To sum up, to maintain an ecological balance
as well
as life cycle,
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some
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animals
are
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used
to
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meet
the requirements of humans that are a debated topic whereas slaughtering is not the
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only
way to overcome this situation. In my opinion, it is
absolutely
right to
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use
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some
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animals
for academia purposes as their existence hardly matters to support the environment.
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IELTS essay Some persons believed that browbeaten animals are undoubtedly harsh meanwhile we need to treat them as other human beings like us consequently, we can observe that specific animal required for rendering help that that is undeniable in respect to no other alternative we have like as a substitute for non-vegetarian cuisine as well as for research.

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4 paragraphs
379 words
6.0
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