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Some people think that when many imported films or TV programmes are shown in a country, it can improve the country’s culture. Others feel that it is better for a country to make and broadcast its own movies and TV shows. Discuss both sides and give your own view.

Some people think that when many imported films or TV programmes are shown in a country, it can improve the country’s culture. Others feel that it is better for a country to make and broadcast its own movies and TV shows. N0Qq
Due to the advancement of technologies a number of human-made inventions came to light, one such discovery is television. Few people believe that channels should air only locally made programs and movies. On the other side of the argument, few people strongly believe that broadcasting international shows and films can help in changing the country’s culture. In this essay, I will explain my views on both points and vigorously oppose the rear one. Local shows and programs will help in boosting the countries economy. People from local areas will get recognition if the show becomes a hit rigorously will help to grow in the future. If the show became a hit it will help in promoting the brand of the channel. For example, let us talk about Ramayana the epic serial aired in lockdown. This breaks all the records of the previous shows and stood top on the rank. India is rich in its cultures and values. Many countries need to learn from Indian culture.
Due to the advancement of technologies a number of human-made inventions came to light, one such discovery is television. Few
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people
believe that channels should air
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only
locally
made programs and movies. On the other side of the argument, few
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people
strongly
believe that broadcasting international
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shows
and films can
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help
in changing the country’s culture. In this essay, I will
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explain
my views on both points and
vigorously
oppose the rear one.

Local
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shows
and programs will
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help
in boosting the
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countries
economy.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
People
from local areas will
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get
recognition if the
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show
becomes a hit
rigorously
will
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help
to grow in the future.
“If” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
If
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
show
became a hit it will
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help
in promoting the brand of the channel.
For example
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
us talk about Ramayana the epic serial aired in lockdown. This breaks all the records of the previous
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shows
and stood top on the rank. India is rich in its cultures and values.
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Many
countries need to learn from Indian culture.

IELTS essay Some people think that when many imported films or TV programmes are shown in a country, it can improve the country’s culture. Others feel that it is better for a country to make and broadcast its own movies and TV shows.

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  American English
2 paragraphs
165 words
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