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Some people think that tourism is one of the helpful ways to increase a countries state. However, others believe that tourism can only damage traditional rules bringing own affect to a society and cause other troubles. To what extent do you agree with?

Some people think that tourism is one of the helpful ways to increase a countries state. However, others believe that tourism can only damage traditional rules bringing own affect to a society and cause other troubles. PVRMw
touristry is a method by which a provincial can bring asset to a state. I strongly support the statement that travel is helpful. However there are some negative sides to the of touristry in our province. My essay will highlight the pros and cons of touristry for a county. Travel is a process by which international people come to a different homey for the historical sight viewing and enjoying the natural environment of that provincial. Many people every year visit as visitor to India and are fascinated by the historical significance of the provincial and the culture. For instance a lot of visitor visit India every year for the historical monuments like Red Fort, Taj Mahal, India Gate etc. These monuments draw attention of the visitor. However, these foreigners are highly charged here in India by the visitor guides. The foreigners are very impressed by the Indian culture and the street food of the famous Chandni Chowk. But we Indians are not at all aware of the significance of the historical monuments. People have pan stained walls, written love signs on the walls destroyed the walls for self pleasure. They are damaging the traditional values of the culture, thus ending the flow of the economy of their provincial touristry helps the government to help run the economy by letting the flow of money thus adding up to the total GDP of the provincial. This GDP helps the government to run the provincial and thus making the nation a developed one. In conclusion, I would like to state that touristry is a good form of economic development and if people stop damaging the cultural heritage of the provincial it would be a very good step in the development of the nation. This can be done by educating people and making them aware about the importance of the heritage buildings of the provincial.
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touristry
is a method by which a
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provincial
can bring asset to a state. I
strongly
support the statement that travel is helpful.
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However
there are
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some
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negative
sides to the of
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touristry
in our province. My essay will highlight the pros and cons of
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touristry
for a county.

Travel is a process by which international
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people
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come
to a
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different
homey for the
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historical
sight viewing and enjoying the natural environment of that
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provincial
.
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Many
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people
every year visit as
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visitor
to India and
are fascinated
by the
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historical
significance of the
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provincial
and the culture.
For instance
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a lot of
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visitor
visit India every year for the
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historical
monuments like Red Fort, Taj Mahal, India Gate etc. These monuments draw attention of the
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visitor
.
However
, these foreigners are
highly
charged here in India by the
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visitor
guides.

The foreigners are
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very
impressed by the Indian culture and the street food of the
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famous
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Chandni
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Chowk
.
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But
we Indians are not at all aware of the significance of the
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historical
monuments.
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People
have pan stained walls, written
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love
signs on the walls
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destroyed
the walls for self pleasure. They are damaging the traditional values of the culture,
thus
ending the flow of the economy of their
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provincial


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touristry
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helps
the
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government
to
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help
run the economy by letting the flow of money
thus
adding up to the total GDP of the
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provincial
. This GDP
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helps
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
to run the
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provincial
and
thus
making the nation a developed one.

In conclusion
, I would like to state that
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touristry
is a
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good
form of economic development and if
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people
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stop
damaging the cultural heritage of the
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provincial
it would be a
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very
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good
step in the development of the nation. This can
be done
by educating
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people
and making them aware about the importance of the heritage buildings of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
provincial
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that tourism is one of the helpful ways to increase a countries state. However, others believe that tourism can only damage traditional rules bringing own affect to a society and cause other troubles.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
311 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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