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Some people think that the only way to relax is rest or sleep, while others say people need to do exercise or sport to relax. Discuss both view points and give your own opinion.

Some people think that the only way to relax is rest or sleep, while others say people need to do exercise or sport to relax. RNLnP
Relaxation is much needed content in the current hectic situation. Some people have an opinion that, only way to get relaxed is rest or sleep, while I think that sport activities or workouts will help to get relaxed On the one hand, Some people think that best way to get relaxed is sleep or rest to elaborate, Now a days all of our society leads a busy schedule and as a result of it makes our body more tired. A better sleep will relaxes our muscles and increase the blood flow as well as it boost our energy. Moreover, while people are resting they also spare there time in hearing light music as well as for watching funny videos it also help to get relaxed. For instance, a research conducted by the Indian Health Organization reveals that, a quick naps in between of heavy job will help to rid off the stress and improves our mood also. Thus, it's state that sleep or rest will help for the relaxation. On the other hand, certain others reckon that, proper excercise or engage in sport activities is pill to get relaxed. To make it clear, Now a days people those are working in a mutinational companies are facing a lot of work pressure and also they didnot engane in any type of physical activities this makes there brain more weak and lead them to some psychological problems. By doing some exercise or sport activities will help them to free from their tension. Through engaging in physical activities, body get heated and some stress relief hormones are produced this will help them to relaxed. For instance, research conducted by the university of Texas reveals that, those who are doing exercise after or before the work have more productivity than other. Hence exercise is the best way to get relaxed. After discussing the both views. In my opinion doing exercise is more better that the sleep. Although, sleep helps to get relaxed, Exercise will helps to make our body strong and give more energy to work efficient as before. To put it in a nutshell. I pen down saying that doing exercise is more better than a sleep to get relaxed.
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relaxed
is rest or
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, while I
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think
that sport
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activities
or workouts will
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help
to
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get
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relaxed


On the one hand,
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people
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think
that best way to
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get
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relaxed
is
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sleep
or rest to elaborate,
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Now a days
all of our society leads a busy schedule and
as a result
of it
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makes
our body more tired. A better
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sleep
will
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relaxes
our muscles and increase the blood flow
as well
as it boost our energy.
Moreover
, while
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people
are resting they
also
spare there time in hearing light music
as well
as for watching
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funny
videos it
also
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help
to
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get
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relaxed
.
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,
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a research
conducted by the Indian Health Organization reveals that, a quick naps in between of heavy job will
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help
to rid off the
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stress
and
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improves
our mood
also
.
Thus
, it's state that
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sleep
or rest will
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help
for the relaxation.

On the other hand
, certain others reckon that, proper
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excercise
or engage in sport
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activities
is pill to
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get
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relaxed
. To
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it
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clear
,
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Now a days
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people
those are working in a
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mutinational
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companies
are facing
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a lot of
work pressure and
also
they
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didnot
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engane
in any type of physical
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activities
this
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makes
there brain more weak and lead them to
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some
psychological problems. By
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doing
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some
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exercise
or sport
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activities
will
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help
them to free from their tension. Through engaging in physical
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activities
, body
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get
heated and
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some
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stress
relief hormones
are produced
this will
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help
them to
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relaxed
.
For instance
, research conducted by the
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university of Texas
reveals that, those who are
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doing
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exercise
after or
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the work have more productivity than other.
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Hence
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exercise
is the best way to
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get
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relaxed
. After discussing the both views. In my opinion
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doing
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exercise
is
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more better
that the
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sleep
. Although,
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sleep
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helps
to
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get
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relaxed
,
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Exercise
will
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helps
to
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make
our body strong and give more energy to work efficient as
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before
. To put it in a nutshell. I pen down saying that
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doing
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exercise
is
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more better
than a
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sleep
to
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get
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relaxed
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that the only way to relax is rest or sleep, while others say people need to do exercise or sport to relax.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
367 words
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