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Some people think that the government is wasting m

As per some folk, they consider governing body of a State Spoil money on the arts and this money government Use better way for mortals facilities and make nation very powerfull. I partially agree with writter notion and my inclination are articulated through insuing Paragraph. first and foremost, governing committee spent money in cultural art but this is very unusull thing because spent money in Improve city and villages. spent money in improving place that is lots of benifites, people are livin with full facilities, Additionally government make many school, Versity librearies for Student career education and all think are very important for student career. moreover, Arts and sculpture are important things for national legacy. and arts had been made naltional velue from old time. Additionally arts are made international value because foriegner visit to country and most of foreigner see arts like ajanta ellora that place at maharastra and so much arts in this place. many foreigner visit this type place cind they like place. It can also help sell a country as a tourist destination music and dance are One type of arts cond they are made lots of job. Further more, paintings and sculptures also have huge value, and people visit museum and admire to artist work and buying a painting. National arts attract foreigner People. for example, indian government promote conventional arts for gaining tourist like Bharatnatyam, Kathkali and many more, so that foreigner attract and buying tickets for see this type of arts and over economy made Stronger. To conclude, government money for sustain arts and they used money for buildings, infrastructure and medical devlopment for future generation, so they would not lot of money for only arts, spent money all things they usefull more mortals.
As per
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some
folk, they consider governing

body of a State Spoil

money on

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arts
and this
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money
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government


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Use
better way for mortals

facilities and
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make
nation

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powerfull
. I
partially
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with
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notion and my

inclination
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first
and foremost, governing committee

spent money

in cultural
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art
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but
this is

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very
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unusull
thing
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spent

money in

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Improve
city and villages.
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spent
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money
in

improving
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that

is lots of
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benifites
,
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people
are
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livin


with full facilities,
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government
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make
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Versity
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librearies
for Student career

education and all
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are
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important
for student career.

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moreover
, Arts

and sculpture are

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important
things for national legacy.

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and
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arts
had
been made
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naltional


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velue
from
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time.
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arts
are made
international value

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foriegner


visit
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to


country and
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most of foreigner


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arts

like
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ajanta
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ellora


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that
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at
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maharastra
and

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in this
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place
.
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many


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foreigner
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visit
this type place

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cind
they like
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also
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help
sell a

country as a

tourist destination music and

dance are One type of
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arts
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cond


they
are made
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lots of job
.

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Further more
, paintings and sculptures

also
have huge value, and
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people


visit museum and admire to

artist work and buying a painting.

National
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arts
attract foreigner

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.
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for
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indian
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promote conventional
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arts
for gaining

tourist like
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Bharatnatyam
,
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Kathkali


and
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more,
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that foreigner attract
and buying tickets for

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see
this type of
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arts
and over

economy made Stronger.

To conclude
,
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government


money for sustain
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arts and
they

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used
money

for buildings,

infrastructure and medical
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devlopment


for future generation,
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so
they

would not
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lot of
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money
for
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arts, spent
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money
all things they
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usefull
more mortals.
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IELTS essay Some people think that the government is wasting m

Essay
  American English
14 paragraphs
291 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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