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Some people think that students in single-sex schools perform better academically. Others, however, believe that mixed schools provide children with better social skills for adult life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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A section of people believe that the government should take care of its citizens’ health, while there are others who disagree with this notion. I tend to believe that people should look after their health rather than expecting the government to step in. In recent times, individual health issues have become a major concern among the society based on factors such as food habits, lifestyle and environment. People think that treatment should be provided by the government health care centers in order to cure the diseases. The hospital expenses an individual has to incur, perhaps, is a significant reason worth considering. For example, people who are below the poverty line would not be able to bear the bills of serious illnesses such as cancer. Hence, people think that the government’s intervention in public health would be beneficial. However, there are a few demerits linked to the government’s involvement in an individual’s health which outbalances its advantages. First of all, interference of the government in an independent’s well-being will drastically affect the economy. A recent survey shows that the government’s debt has been increased to 17% because of the free treatment, which consecutively jeopardises the GDP. In addition to this, apart from financial support, people will take the government's offering for granted and hence self-discipline of an individual will also be negatively influenced. To conclude, in line with the views presented above, it is evident that the government cannot provide financial assistance to each and every citizen and the individual has to look after their own, by considering the enormity and dreadful impacts it could possibly have on the economy. Therefore, I reiterate the claim that the people themselves should take the responsibility for their own health.
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believe that the
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should take care of its citizens’
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health
, while there are others who disagree with this notion. I tend to believe that
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people
should look after their
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health
rather
than expecting the
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government
to step in.

In recent times,
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individual
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health
issues have become a major concern among the society based on factors such as food habits, lifestyle and environment.
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think
that treatment should
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by the
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government
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care centers in order to cure the diseases. The hospital expenses an
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individual
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incur, perhaps, is a significant reason worth considering.
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who are below the poverty line would not be able to bear the bills of serious illnesses such as cancer.
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people
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intervention in public
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health
would be beneficial.

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, there are a few demerits linked to the
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government’s
involvement in an
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individual’s
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health
which outbalances its advantages.
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First of all
, interference of the
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government
in an independent’s well-being will
drastically
affect the economy. A recent survey
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shows
that the
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government’s
debt has
been increased
to 17%
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because
of the free treatment, which
consecutively
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jeopardises
the GDP.
In addition
to this, apart from financial support,
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people
will take the
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government
's offering for granted and
hence
self-discipline of an
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individual
will
also
be
negatively
influenced.

To conclude
, in line with the views presented above, it is evident that the
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government
cannot provide financial assistance to each and every citizen and the
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individual
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
has to
look after their
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own
, by considering the enormity and dreadful impacts it could
possibly
have on the economy.
Therefore
, I reiterate the claim that the
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people
themselves should take the responsibility for their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
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health
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that students in single-sex schools perform better academically. Others, however, believe that mixed schools provide children with better social skills for adult life.

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286 words
6.5
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