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Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.1

Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. v. 1 nOee
In modern times, decreasing road accidents have become highly controversial. While it can be argued that rigorous laws for punishment are a good solution to prevent occurring accidents by vehicles, another opinion is that we should enhance the security level of the roads to diminish the proliferation of this phenomenon. In this essay, I will examine both sides of the argument and provide my overall opinion. Generally speaking, there are a variety of reasons which describe the importance of the punishment to reduce traffic problems. Firstly, the aim of applying penalties to persons who run very quickly by their cars is to obligate them to walk slowly, more concentrated and respect the road. This is because there are a number of negative effects on human health namely unconsciousness, bone brokenness, and maybe finally death. A mother type of punishment is that money punishment, this mainly occurs when the person exceeds the normal speed. in brief, these kinds of punishments can solve the problem of traffic accidents and improve our quality of life. Despite these arguments, there is also a case of the idea that reinforcing the capacity and the safety of the road is the principal orientation nowadays. perhaps that the main reason is that expanding roads and update their services are the chief goal of authorities to provide roads with good qualities. For instance, the percentage of accidents in advanced countries is very low due to the big interest on their roads. As a result, all shapes of life are very easy and people feel comfortable at all times. In addition, these actions facilitate governments and individuals to overcome other problems such as saving people on the traffics very quickly as the ambulance reach exactly at the correct time. If people help the governments by taking care of their roads, the proportion of accidents in traffics disappears time after time. In conclusion, i strongly agree that both sides of view are increasingly important. several punishments are required however the countries shouldn't forget their duties about improving their facilities to obtain life with sufficient safety.
In modern
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times
, decreasing
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road
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accidents
have become
highly
controversial. While it can
be argued
that rigorous laws for
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punishment
are a
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good
solution to
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prevent
occurring
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accidents
by vehicles, another opinion is that we should enhance the security level of the
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roads
to diminish the proliferation of this phenomenon. In this essay, I will examine both sides of the argument and provide my
overall
opinion.

Generally
speaking, there are a variety of reasons which
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describe
the importance of the
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punishment
to
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reduce
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traffic
problems.
Firstly
, the aim of applying penalties to persons who run
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very
quickly
by their cars is to obligate them to walk
slowly
, more concentrated and respect the
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road
. This is
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because
there are a number of
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negative
effects on human health
namely
unconsciousness, bone brokenness, and maybe
finally
death. A mother type of
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punishment
is that money
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punishment
, this
mainly
occurs when the person exceeds the normal speed.
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in
brief, these kinds of
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punishments
can solve the problem of
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traffic
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accidents
and
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improve
our quality of life.

Despite these arguments, there is
also
a case of the
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idea
that reinforcing the capacity and the safety of the
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road
is the principal orientation nowadays.
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perhaps
that the main reason is that expanding
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roads
and update their services are the chief goal of authorities to provide
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roads
with
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good
qualities.
For instance
, the percentage of
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accidents
in advanced countries is
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very
low due to the
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big
interest on their
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roads
.
As a result
, all shapes of life are
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very
easy and
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people
feel comfortable at all
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times
.
In addition
, these actions facilitate
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governments
and individuals to overcome other problems such as saving
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people
on the
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traffics
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very
quickly
as the ambulance reach exactly at the correct
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time
. If
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people
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help
the
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governments
by taking care of their
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roads
, the proportion of
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accidents
in
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traffics
disappears
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time
after time.

In conclusion
,
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i
strongly
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agree
that both sides of view are
increasingly
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important
.
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several
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punishments
are required
however
the countries shouldn't forget their duties about improving their facilities to obtain life with sufficient safety.
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IELTS essay Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. v. 1

Essay
  American English
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