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Some people think that media (newspapers) should publish information of people's private lives. While, others think newspaper should be controlled so that they don't publish news on people's lives. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people think that media (newspapers) should publish information of people's private lives. While, others think newspaper should be controlled so that they don't publish news on people's lives. PVGad
Many people believe that in the newspaper, people's personal life can be discussed while others argue that they should be stopped in publishing such information. However, I believe that the mass media should be controlled by the government so that they respect the privacy of each individual and publish what is required. Let us delve deeper into this issue in the upcoming paragraphs. On the one hand, publishing news about artists and actors is good for their fans and followers. As the youth today considers sports persons, politicians and actors as their role model, getting a glimpse of their personal activity is not harmful in any way. The difference between the artists reel and real life can be depicted through media and news. For example, if media publish the struggle behind the success of any celebrity, it will motivate the youth to work harder and achieve their goals. Moreover, we get to know the political leader's social activity through the media which helps us to decide whether that politician is capable to rule or not. Conversely, I believe that the public should not forget that the celebrities and politicians are also human beings who deserve some privacy. First of all, Invading people's personal growth can lead to insecurities. As many public figures have opponents and enemies, publishing private information can have detrimental effects on their careers. For instance, Sushant Singh, a Bollywood celebrity committed suicide after being in a depression for several months because media published his personal activities. Therefore, the overall productivity of the artist will increase when there is no such conflict. In conclusion, while there are arguments in favour of mass media, publishing people's private life, I believe that the media should not invade people's privacy for entertaining or profitable purposes, and the government should take action if media publish any inappropriate content.
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government
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publishing
news about artists and actors is
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good
for their fans and followers. As the youth
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today
considers sports persons, politicians and actors as their role model, getting a glimpse of their
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personal
activity is not harmful in any way. The difference between the artists reel and real life can
be depicted
through
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media
and news.
For example
, if
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media
publish the struggle behind the success of any celebrity, it will motivate the youth to work harder and achieve their goals.
Moreover
, we
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get
to know the political leader's social activity through the
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media
which
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helps
us to decide whether that politician is capable to
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that the public should not forget that the celebrities and politicians are
also
human beings who deserve
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privacy.
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First of all
, Invading
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people's
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personal
growth can lead to insecurities. As
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many
public figures have opponents and enemies,
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publishing
private information can have detrimental effects on their careers.
For instance
,
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Sushant
Singh, a Bollywood celebrity committed suicide after being in a depression for several months
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media
published his
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personal
activities.
Therefore
, the
overall
productivity of the artist will increase when there is no such conflict.

In conclusion
, while there are arguments in
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favour
of mass
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media
,
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publishing
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people's
private life, I
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believe
that the
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media
should not invade
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people's
privacy for entertaining or profitable purposes, and the
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government
should take action if
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media
publish any inappropriate content.
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IELTS essay Some people think that media (newspapers) should publish information of people's private lives. While, others think newspaper should be controlled so that they don't publish news on people's lives.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
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