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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad. Discuss both views and state your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 254 words.

: Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad. m19Gr
Number of people think that arranging an international sports event is advantageous for the nation, however other people think that it not good. I believe that, it is very important to host international sports for the country. Firstly, Sports is the event where you can learn many things like attitude, ego, decipline and humbleness. These are the important factors for living life. When some country organizes sports for overseas people, it shows that country's fanancial ability and strength. Also it is kind of county's publicity for foreign people. Moreover it will effect on countries tourisum bussiness and that country will get more foreign currency. For instance, India is the single country in asia which arranges IPL matches for international players. In IPL many players get chance to prove themselves. That is very big apportunity for players. Another thing is, India also hosted Asian games which includes international sports. So many players get chance for these evets too. On the other side, some people think it is not good because, for internatinal sports country has to invest lots of money for all the arrangements of players. Like accomodation and maintenance of the playgrounds etc. So, it is waste of money. Instead of that money can be used for countries other important projects. To conclude, sports event is part of life and hosting international sport is an encouragement and motivation for players to do well in their game. On the top of that it is very benificial for countries growth.
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think
that arranging an
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international
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sports
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event
is advantageous for the nation,
however
other
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people
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think
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it
not
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good
. I believe that, it is
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important
to host
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international
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sports
for the country.

Firstly
,
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Sports
is the
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event
where you can learn
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many
things like attitude, ego,
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decipline
and humbleness. These are the
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important
factors for living life. When
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some
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country
organizes
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sports
for overseas
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people
, it
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shows
that country's
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fanancial
ability and strength.
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Also
it is kind of county's publicity for foreign
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people
.
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Moreover
it will
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effect
on
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countries
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tourisum
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bussiness
and that
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country
will
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get
more foreign currency.
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, India is the single
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country
in
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asia
which arranges
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IPL
matches for
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international
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players
. In
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IPL
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many
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players
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get
chance to prove themselves.
That is
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very
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big
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apportunity
for players.

Another thing is, India
also
hosted Asian games which includes
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international
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sports
.
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So
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many
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players
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get
chance for these
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evets
too.

On the other side,
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people
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think
it is not
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good
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because
, for
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internatinal
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sports
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country
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has to
invest lots of money for all the arrangements of
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players
. Like
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accomodation
and maintenance of the playgrounds etc.

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So
, it is waste of money.
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of that money can be
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used
for
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countries
other
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important
projects.

To conclude
,
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sports
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event
is part of life and hosting
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international
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sport
is an encouragement and motivation for
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players
to do well in their game. On the top of that it is
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very
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benificial
for
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countries
growth.
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IELTS essay : Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad.

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
248 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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