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Some people think that governments should spend more money on sports facilities for top athletes. others argue that this money should be spent for sports facilities for ordinary people. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

Some people think that governments should spend more money on sports facilities for top athletes. others argue that this money should be spent for sports facilities for ordinary people. E8XB
Sports play a key role in human life. Whether Government should spend more money on sports facilities for athletes or for the betterment of citizen's sports facilities has sparked much debate. Both the arguments have their own pros and cons. This essay will discuss both the views and conclusion will have my opinion. Convincing arguments can be made that athletes need more improved facilities as they are playing sports at the international and national level. First of all, if governments provide them luxurious sports facilities to athletes then it would help to earn name and fame in the world. Thus, indirectly nation can earn value if they focus more on athletes' sports facilities. Moreover, this kind of help to athletes eventually leads to the growth of the overall nation also impacts the economy of the country. Despite that ordinary people also need some level of facilities. On the other side, citizens also pay huge amounts of tax every year. So, some people argued that government needs to focus on sports facilities for ordinary people. first and foremost, sports play a pivotal role in people's health condition. If the government provides excellent sports clubs to all cities that will help to improve the health conditions of people. It can be seen that a healthy nation is a wealthy nation. For example, developed nations such as Japan, America provides all kinds of sports facilities in mostly all rural areas, surveys conducted by WHO(world health organization) say that numbers and facilities given by sports centers indirectly decreased the burden of hospitals. Moreover, parents can teach their children about the importance of sports, improved sports facilities may bring the hidden talent of children. To pen down, I would say that sports are equally important for everyone. Nevertheless, ordinary people who are major in numbers and their health problems can be improved by sports clubs. Overall, I am convinced that ordinary people needed the best sports facilities.
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should spend more money on
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facilities for
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athletes
or for the betterment of citizen's
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sports
facilities has sparked much debate. Both the arguments have their
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pros and cons. This essay will discuss both the views and conclusion will have my opinion. Convincing arguments can
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athletes
need more
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improved
facilities as they are playing
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sports
at the international and national level.
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, if
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governments
provide them luxurious
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sports
facilities to
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athletes
then it would
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help
to earn name and fame in the world.
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,
indirectly
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nation
can earn value if they focus more on athletes'
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sports
facilities.
Moreover
, this kind of
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help
to
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athletes
eventually
leads to the growth of the
overall
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nation
also
impacts the economy of the country. Despite that
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ordinary
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people
also
need
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some
level of facilities. On the other side, citizens
also
pay huge amounts of tax every year.
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,
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argued that
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government
needs to focus on
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facilities for
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ordinary
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people
.
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and foremost,
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play a pivotal role in
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people
's
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health
condition.
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If
the
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government
provides excellent
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sports
clubs to all cities that will
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help
to
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improve
the
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health
conditions of
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people
. It can be
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seen
that a healthy
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nation
is a wealthy
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nation
.
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, developed
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nations
such as Japan, America provides all kinds of
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sports
facilities in
mostly
all rural areas, surveys conducted by
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WHO
(world
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health
organization) say that numbers and facilities
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given
by
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sports
centers
indirectly
decreased the burden of hospitals.
Moreover
, parents can teach their children about the importance of
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sports
,
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improved
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sports
facilities may bring the hidden talent of children. To pen down, I would say that
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sports
are
equally
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important
for everyone.
Nevertheless
,
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ordinary
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people
who are major in numbers and their
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health
problems can be
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improved
by
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sports
clubs.
Overall
, I
am convinced
that
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ordinary
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people
needed the best
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sports
facilities.
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IELTS essay Some people think that governments should spend more money on sports facilities for top athletes. others argue that this money should be spent for sports facilities for ordinary people.

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