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• Some people think that children should start learning a foreign language at primary school while others think children should begin in secondary school. • Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

whether or not children should learn a internatinal language is a matter of debate. some teachers and parents insist that cheldren have to learn a second language at primary school. However, others completely oppose this view and claim it is too early for children and they must deal with foreign language at secondary school. Both view should be discussed in this essay before arriving to conclusion. nowadays, dozens of parents believe that children should learn more language from 7 years old. scienentists approve it is possible to learn more than one language from primary school. For instance, i know a man learned 4 language simultaneously from 4 years old. On top of all that, they think learning foreign language is not to be easy by passing time becuase in little years human can learn more and more. In addition, childs brain especially child under 10 years simillar to white paper that can be write every things on it. On the other hands, some others agree children learn second language in secondary school. They consider it is too early to teach foreign language for children. for instance children can not find out mother language with foreign language at the same time. Also, childen endure excessive pessure by learning language early. Some scientists consider children should learn mothers language at first step. Otherwise, they may not learn his first language completely. In my opinion, children should began to learn multiple language at primary school simultaneiosly. In a nutshell, it is clear learning a foreign language at primary school will have a certain contribution but it has some risks for children. for example, they may be forget their mother language and they may not learn appropriate both language constantly.
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whether
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children
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learn
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internatinal
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language
is a matter of debate.
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some
teachers and parents insist that
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cheldren
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have to
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learn
a second
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language
at
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primary
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school
.
However
, others completely oppose this view and claim it is too early for
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children and
they
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must
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foreign
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language
at secondary
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school
. Both view should
be discussed
in this essay
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before
arriving to conclusion.

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nowadays
, dozens of parents believe that
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children
should
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learn
more
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language
from 7 years
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old
.
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scienentists
approve it is possible to
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learn
more than one
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language
from
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primary
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school
.
For instance
,
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i
know a
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learned 4
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language
simultaneously
from 4 years
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old
. On top of all that, they
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think
learning
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foreign
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language
is not to be easy by passing time
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becuase
in
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little
years human can
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learn
more and more.
In addition
,
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childs
brain
especially
child under 10 years
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simillar
to white paper that can be
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write
every
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things
on it.

On the other hands,
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some
others
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agree
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children
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learn
second
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language
in secondary
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school
. They consider it is too early to teach
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foreign
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language
for
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children
.
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for
instance
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children
can not find out mother
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language
with
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foreign
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language
at the same time.
Also
,
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childen
endure excessive
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pessure
by learning
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language
early.
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Some
scientists consider
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children
should
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learn
mothers
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language
at
first
step.
Otherwise
, they may not
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learn
his
first
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language
completely.

In my opinion,
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children
should
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began
to
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learn
multiple
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language
at
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primary
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school
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simultaneiosly
.

In a nutshell, it is
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learning a
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foreign
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language
at
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primary
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school
will have a certain contribution
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but
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some
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for
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children
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for
example, they
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may be
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forget
their mother
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language and
they may not
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learn
appropriate both
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language
constantly
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IELTS essay • Some people think that children should start learning a foreign language at primary school while others think children should begin in secondary school. •

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
286 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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