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As people live longer and longer, the idea of cloning human beingss in order to provide spare parts is becoming a reality. The idea horrifies most people, yet it is no longer mere science fiction.

As science and technology developing quickly many science fictions are becoming reality. Nowadays there is concern about using clone humans as a donor in order to provide spare organs. I disagree with the statement because of two reasons. it will affect natural balances and this is a crime. First of all, people can die because of some of their organs do not function properly. if this medical disorder can't be prevented by treatment and surgery scientist find another way called implantation. Furthermore, Today finding donors is very difficult because some of donor`s and patient`s properties should be relevant such as blood group. This lead doctors to use clone as donor. As a result, people will live longer than they should live and this will cause the growth of world population. uniqueness of each person will break up. this means two people can have the same fingerprint. Finally, using human clones as spare organ provider is inevitable corollary of overpopulation. Second of all, using human clones is like first giving life to them after that killing by using their organs. Because Clones are humans like us although there is some differences in emotion, thinking, etc killing them is the same as murdering real human. To prevent this human cloning should be globally banned. consequence of this will be leaving people to live with natural way in life. To conclude, Using clones as spare organ providers is not justified due to fact that, it will change the natural balance in the world. Furthermore, there is no difference between killing clones and killing humans. Both of them is crime.
As science and technology developing
quickly
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many
science fictions are becoming reality. Nowadays there is concern about using
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clone
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humans
as a
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donor
in order to provide spare
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organs
. I disagree with the statement
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because
of two reasons.
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it
will affect natural balances and this is a crime.

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people
can
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die
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because
of
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of their
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organs
do not function
properly
.
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if
this medical disorder can't be
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prevented
by treatment and surgery scientist find another way called implantation.
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,
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Today
finding
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donors
is
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very
difficult
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because
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some
of
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and
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patient`s
properties should be relevant such as blood group. This lead doctors to
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use
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clone
as
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donor
.
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people
will
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live
longer than they should
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live
and this will cause the growth of world population.
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uniqueness
of each person will break up. this means two
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people
can have the same fingerprint.
Finally
, using
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human
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clones
as spare
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organ
provider is inevitable corollary of overpopulation.

Second of all, using
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human
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clones
is like
first
giving life to them after that
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killing
by using their
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organs
.
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Clones
are
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humans
like us although there is
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some
differences in emotion, thinking, etc
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killing
them is the same as murdering real
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human
. To
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prevent
this
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human
cloning should be globally banned.
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consequence
of this will be leaving
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people
to
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live
with natural way in life.

To conclude
, Using
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clones
as spare
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organ
providers is not justified due to fact that, it will
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change
the natural balance in the world.
Furthermore
, there is no difference between
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killing
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clones
and
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killing
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humans
. Both of them
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is
crime.
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IELTS essay As people live longer and longer, the idea of cloning human beingss in order to provide spare parts is becoming a reality. The idea horrifies most people, yet it is no longer mere science fiction.

Essay
  American English
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266 words
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