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Some people think that childcare centres provide the best services for children of pre school age. Other working people think that family members such as grandparents will be better carers for their kids. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There are split opinion regarding baby care centres are better option for providing an appropriate services to children. Whereas, other group of people support grandparents would better carers for their babies. Both views has its own pros and cons. I, however believe that child care centred services are good for children in the age group of 3 to 5 years. Because of the management and the whole staff members are trained and large number of equipments also available there for looking after the children. Examine the former decivsion, the primary arguments would put forward is for children's better care only baby care centres are suitable to keep thenm safe and for nurturing. This is because their way of dealing the problem related to children health are valuable and all of them have professional degree level. Also, they are educated and give preference to cleanliness. On the contrary, the latter view suggests that family members can take better care for their children. They believe that “Blood is thicker than blood”. By this, they mean child care centres have not the feelings of belongingness. Beside this, child care centre's nurses beat kids when they are in anger. To conclude and give my opinion, I would say that child care centre's are good for giving a services to children of pre age school. Because they have all the qualification and values. So this is an appropriate way to deal with this situation.
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are split
opinion regarding baby
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care
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centres
are
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better
option for providing
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an appropriate services
to
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children
. Whereas, other group of
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people
support grandparents would
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better
carers for their babies. Both views
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has
its
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own
pros and cons. I,
however
believe that
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child
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care
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centred
services are
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good
for
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children
in the age group of 3 to 5 years.
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Because
of the management and the whole staff members
are trained
and large number of equipments
also
available there for looking after the children.

Examine the former
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decivsion
, the primary arguments would put forward is for children's
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better
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care
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only
baby
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care
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centres
are suitable to
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keep
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thenm
safe and for nurturing. This is
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because
their way of dealing the problem related to
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children
health are valuable and all of them have professional degree level.
Also
, they
are educated
and give preference to cleanliness.

On the contrary
, the latter view suggests that family members can take
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better
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care
for their
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children
. They believe that “Blood is thicker than blood”. By this, they mean
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child
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care
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centres
have not the feelings of belongingness.
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Beside
this,
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child
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care
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centre
's nurses beat kids when they are in anger.

To conclude
and give my opinion, I would say that
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child
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care
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centre's
are
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good
for giving
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a services
to
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children
of
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pre
age school.
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Because
they have all the qualification and values.
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So
this is an appropriate way to deal with this situation.
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IELTS essay Some people think that childcare centres provide the best services for children of pre school age. Other working people think that family members such as grandparents will be better carers for their kids.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
239 words
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