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Write about the following topic: Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 254 words.

Nowaday, schools teach youngers not only acadamic knowledge, but also give chances to let them communicate with others. Some people think they should do one more step, which is teaching them how to be a good father or mother. Some people suggested that there is a standalized formula to be a good parent, as a result, it will be more efficient to teach them when they are young. I disagree with this point of view. There should not be a standalized formula. As we all know that every people are different. We need to communicate in order to know what others want. Children are learning how to communicate with other through interacting with others. It also applies when they are still a baby. It isn't a skill that can be taught, and from time to time, we all learning from experiences but not by teaching. As I remember when I was young, my parent always ask me to have a phone call to them no matter how late it is when I was going to be back home late. At that time, I though it is not a good idea as I may woke you up from your dream. After I growed up, I understood the idea behind, which is they always afraid I get hurt, no matter how old I am. In my option, I do think understanding others feel is the key feature to be a good parent. Without this, you will never understand what your children are thinking of. How we can train up this skill? I think the proper way is to communicate with others. Ask for their feedback when it is possible, as we all know that there isn't a single person same as I.
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give chances to
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communicate
with others.
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people
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think
they should do one more step, which is teaching them how to be a
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good
father or mother.
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Some
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people
suggested that there is a
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standalized
formula to be a
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good
parent,
as a result
, it will be more efficient to teach them when they are young.

I disagree with this point of view. There should not be a
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standalized
formula.
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As
we all know that every
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people
are
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different
. We need to
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communicate
in order to know what others want. Children are learning how to
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communicate
with
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other
through interacting with others. It
also
applies when they are
still
a baby. It isn't a
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skill
that can
be taught
, and from time to time, we all learning from experiences
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but
not by teaching.

As I remember when I was young, my parent always ask me to have a phone call to them no matter how late it is when I was going to be back home late. At that time, I
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though
it is not a
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good
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idea
as I may
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woke
you up from your dream. After I
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growed
up, I understood the
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idea
behind, which
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is
they always afraid I
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get
hurt, no matter how
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old
I am.

In my option, I do
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think
understanding others feel is the key feature to be a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
good
parent. Without this, you will never understand what your children are thinking of. How we can train up this
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skill
? I
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think
the proper way is to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
communicate
with others.
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Ask for
their feedback when it is possible, as we all know that there isn't a single person same as I.
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IELTS essay : Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
290 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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