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Some people think children should begaon their formal education at a,very small age other think ylthey should begin after 7 years of age discuss both the view and give your opinion

Some people think children should begaon their formal education at a, very small age other think ylthey should begin after 7 years of age discuss both the view and give your opinion 2R2yA
In the contemporary world, thinking of people is more open as compared to past decade human owing to fact that they believe at age 3 year or 4 year is suitable for children to start the their formal education while other think that in earlier age is not perfect to learn education due to which they believe children should start study after at the age of 7 years according to my perspective view that different people have distinct mindset the following paragraphs would be shed light on the both approach before making final note. On the one hand, there are several reasons why a few individuals think that earlier age is best age for children to learning elementary age firstly, in small age they can learn extremely small things easily as well as they will not face difficulties to left the own parents for go to the school To elaborate it, if toddlers starts school at the age of very small they will not only learn various kind knowledge on the contrary also sense of humour would be more strong as compared to those kids who starts school after the age of 7 year for example, the recent survey conducted by the Oxford University that, in the whole world 80 percent adolescent starts school at the age of 3rd year or 4th year in fact at this age very small students learn different kinds of poems, stories, and counting as so on however, if children starts education small age definitely they will finish whole education smallest age owing to which they will have more opportunities to choose the careers path therefore, children should start primary education at the earlier age because at this they do not have more attachment with house as, well as house members. On the othe hand, those masses say that if kids start school at the very small age it is fully waste of money in the light of the fact that they do not able to learn any thing bdue to help of mentor to define it,
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people
is more open as compared to past decade human owing to fact that they believe at
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age
3
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year
or 4
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year
is suitable for
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children
to
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start
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education
while other
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that in earlier
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age
is not perfect to
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learn
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education
due to which they believe
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children
should
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start
study after at the
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age
of 7 years according to my perspective view that
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different
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people
have distinct mindset the following paragraphs would
be shed
light on the both approach
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before
making final note.

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think
that earlier
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age
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for
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children
to learning elementary
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firstly
, in
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small
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they can
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extremely
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things
easily
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left
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parents for go to the
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school
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starts
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school
at the
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age
of
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very
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small
they will not
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only
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learn
various kind knowledge
on the contrary
also
sense of
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would be more strong as compared to those kids who
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after the
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of 7
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for example
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starts
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school
at the
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of 3rd
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age
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very
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students
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children
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education
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small
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age
definitely they will finish whole
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education
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owing to which they will have more opportunities to choose the
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path
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,
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start
primary
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education
at the earlier
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age
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at this they do not have more attachment with
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as, well as
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members.

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school
at the
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very
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small
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it is
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waste of money in the light of the fact that they do not able to
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learn
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IELTS essay Some people think children should begaon their formal education at a, very small age other think ylthey should begin after 7 years of age discuss both the view and give your opinion

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
342 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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