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Some people seek a lot of advice from family and friends when choosing their career. Others feel it is better to choose a career more independently. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Choosing a career can be a challenging process. It can be difficult to say whether this decision should be made alone, or made with input from loved ones. In my opinion, it is best to find one’s career independently, with no more than a small amount of advice from family or friends. Below, I will explain why I feel that we must ultimately face career decisions on our own. Getting career guidance input from loved ones can be confusing rather than useful. Family and friends likely have different careers, and thus give different, conflicting advice. Suppose, for instance, that your father is a teacher, your mother is an accountant, and your best friend is a nurse. They have all made very different career decisions, and only have knowledge on their respective careers. Different people will likely only steer you to their careers, without giving good advice on your own best path. In contrast, focusing on one’s own preferences and skills provides a clearer path to the right career. After all, individuals have the best knowledge of their own abilities and interests. As an example, if someone has gone to university to study biology, they will know more about biology careers than a family member or friend who does not have that same kind of training. Ultimately, your career must be built on your own training and experience, not the training and experience of others. For the reasons I’ve outlined above, I really do believe that career decisions are a matter of personal knowledge. Other people, even trusted family and friends, simply cannot understand your career the way you can. To select your field of work wisely, you must face this important decision alone.
Choosing a
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can be a challenging process. It can be difficult to say whether this
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should
be made
alone, or made with input from
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. In my opinion, it is
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best
to find one’s
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career
independently
, with no more than a
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small
amount of advice from
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family
or
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friends
. Below, I will
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explain
why I feel that we
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must
ultimately
face
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decisions
on our
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own
.

Getting
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career
guidance input from
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loved
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ones
can be confusing
rather
than useful.
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and
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friends
likely have
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different
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careers
, and
thus
give
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different
, conflicting advice. Suppose,
for instance
, that your father is a teacher, your mother is an accountant, and your
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best
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friend
is a nurse. They have all made
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very
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different
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career
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decisions
, and
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only
have knowledge on their respective
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careers
.
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Different
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people
will likely
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only
steer you to their
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careers
, without giving
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good
advice on your
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own
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best
path.

In contrast
, focusing on one’s
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own
preferences and
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skills
provides a clearer path to the right
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career
.
After all
, individuals have the
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best
knowledge of their
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own
abilities and interests. As an example, if someone has gone to university to study biology, they will know more about biology
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careers
than a
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family
member or
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friend
who does not have that same kind of training.
Ultimately
, your
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career
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must
be built
on your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
training and experience, not the training and experience of others.

For the reasons I’ve outlined above, I
really
do believe that
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career
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decisions
are a matter of personal knowledge. Other
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people
, even trusted
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family
and
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,
simply
cannot understand your
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career
the way you can. To select your field of work
wisely
, you
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must
face this
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alone.
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IELTS essay Some people seek a lot of advice from family and friends when choosing their career. Others feel it is better to choose a career more independently.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
6.0
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