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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. 7XOY
Deteriorations occurred to our environment is a big problem that we face nowadays. A number of individuals see that the extinction of specific species of animals and plants is the major environmental problem. Nevertheless, others believe there are environmental issues which are more momentous. In contrast, I believe that all problems are related to each other. On the one hand, expiration in number of plants or animals is one of the problems faced by the governments in this decade. Throughout decades, there are a lot of species are extinct. For example, dinosaurs as well as mammoth. Extinction of one specie will affect the ecological chain also our nutrition. For instance, if we lose the presence of bees, it will affect the reproductive process in flowers by stop moving pollen grains from flower to another, besides that, we can’t get honey (which provide us by important nutrients for our body such as vitamins) anymore. On the other hand, several people believe that some environmental problems are more important. For exemplify, a sharp increase in carbon dioxide gas can be observed in the air. The increase in global warming is caused by the raise in Carbon dioxide gas proportion. It’s resulted from smoke that is produced from factory chimneys or automobile exhaust. I opine that, all environmental problems is dangerous and serious ones. Because if one problem exist, it will affect the others. For instance, when carbon dioxide percentage raise in the air, it will affect plant growth for sure. All in all, we should pay attention to all problems that exist in our environment and find ways to prevent it.
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occurred to our environment is a
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big
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problem
that we face nowadays. A number of individuals
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see
that the extinction of specific species of animals and plants is the major
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environmental
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problem
.
Nevertheless
, others believe there are
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environmental
issues which are more momentous.
In contrast
, I believe that all
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problems
are related
to each other.

On the one hand, expiration in number of plants or animals is one of the
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problems
faced by the
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governments
in this decade. Throughout decades, there are
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a lot of
species are extinct.
For example
, dinosaurs
as well
as mammoth. Extinction of one specie will
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affect
the ecological chain
also
our nutrition.
For instance
, if we lose the presence of bees, it will
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
affect
the reproductive process in flowers by
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
moving pollen grains from flower to another,
besides
that, we can’t
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
honey (which provide us by
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important
nutrients for our body such as vitamins) anymore.

On the other hand
, several
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people
believe that
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some
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environmental
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problems
are more
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important
. For exemplify, a sharp increase in carbon dioxide gas can
be observed
in the air. The increase in global warming
is caused
by the raise in Carbon dioxide gas proportion. It’s resulted from smoke that
is produced
from factory chimneys or automobile exhaust.

I opine that, all
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environmental
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problems
is
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dangerous
and serious ones.
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Because
if one
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problem
exist, it will
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affect
the others.
For instance
, when carbon dioxide percentage raise in the air, it will
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affect
plant growth for sure.

All in all, we should pay attention to all
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problems
that exist in our environment and find ways to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
it.
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IELTS essay Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

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