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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. 1lKy
The modern world is extremely aware and conscious of ecological problems that occurred hundreds of years ago but are expanded nowadays. Environmental activists split up into those who mostly care about endangered species of flora and fauna, and others that are concerned about global warming, deforestation, etc. The question is what issue is more important for the present day and thus requires a solution now. The former problem consequences can be seen quite impressive since there is a number of species that have been extinct already. Furthermore, some of them are on the verge of extinction right now, for instance, Chinese pandas of which there are less than a hundred left in the whole world. The same situation is observed with Amur tigers and many other animals, who are hardly bred in zoos to prevent their extinction. The extent of variation within species affects the further evolution of humankind and technological progress, according to the fact that a range of inventions was either inspired by some analysis of animal behavior or obtained from unique biological research on components of fauna. On the other hand, there is a great list of environmental issues that affect human evolution today or in a short time, namely global warming, water and noise pollution, deforestation, etc. Society continues to worsen these by the absence of preventive actions because the consequences are not considerable enough in daily life. Few hundred years from now, and clean water will not be approachable for everyone like it is now. This is the main reason why eco-activists are concerned about other problems more. In conclusion, every environmental problem needs at least some active actions despite its importance. Although solving the latter problems will have effects on the problem of endangered species, therefore, in my opinion, it is reasonable to solve them first.
The modern world is
extremely
aware and conscious of ecological
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problems
that occurred hundreds of years ago
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but
are expanded
nowadays. Environmental activists split up into those who
mostly
care about endangered species of flora and fauna,
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and others
that
are concerned
about global warming, deforestation, etc. The question is what issue is more
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important
for the present day and
thus
requires a solution
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now
.

The former
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problem
consequences can be
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seen
quite impressive since there is a number of species that have been extinct already.
Furthermore
,
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some
of them are on the verge of extinction right
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now
,
for instance
, Chinese pandas of which there are less than a hundred
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left
in the whole world. The same situation
is observed
with Amur tigers and
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many
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other
animals, who are hardly bred in zoos to
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prevent
their extinction. The extent of variation within species affects the
further
evolution of humankind and technological progress, according to the fact that a range of inventions was either inspired by
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some
analysis of animal behavior or obtained from unique biological research on components of fauna.

On the
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other
hand, there is a great list of environmental issues that affect human evolution
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today
or in a short time,
namely
global warming, water and noise pollution, deforestation, etc. Society continues to worsen these by the absence of preventive actions
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because
the consequences are not considerable
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enough
in daily life. Few hundred years from
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now
, and clean water will not be approachable for everyone like it is
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now
. This is the main reason why
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eco-activists
are concerned
about
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other
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problems
more.

In conclusion
, every environmental
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problem
needs at least
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some
active actions despite its importance. Although solving the latter
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problems
will have effects on the
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problem
of endangered species,
therefore
, in my opinion, it is reasonable to solve them
first
.
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IELTS essay Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

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