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Some people say that the aim of university education is to get good job in the future ,however others think that it benefits both graduates and companies . discuss both views and give your opinion

Some people say that the aim of university education is to get good job in the future, however others think that it benefits both graduates and companies. discuss both views and give your opinion QLWkK
Nowadays, the trend of pursuing high studies is very common among students, when some people think that the purposes of high degrees consist to get more opportunities in the future, others argue that university education is advantageous for graduates as well as companies. In my opinion, I believe that good knowledge is the key to success for all. In the one hand, comparing to previous years, nowadays access to learning is free, the majority have basic knowledge, the rate of qualified workforce is important, so high positions and high salary are reserved for high studies, in other meaning each position demand a specific level of training, the degree request to be a director is not the same as for an operator. For example, an employee with good experience can’t get a good salary or access to a manager position if he doesn’t have an adequate diploma. that is why university schooling is essential. In the other hand, the trend of selecting candidates with high-level education is common among recruiters, it’s important for a company to have a qualified staff for many reasons. The first one is through skilled workers companies are looking for boosting their productivity as well as their creativity. Adding to that the number of graduates and their level gives a high position for the society in the market because more the employees are competent more collaborators trust the company. For instance, some companies as Cervical group in Algeria open their own institute and train their future employees in different fields. To conclude, it’s obvious that high education level open doors and give more chance to get a decent job with a good salary, however, companies also benefit from this, high educated team attract more partners’. Personally, I think that university studies are advantageous for both. It helps individuals to held high positions indeed the employer to improve their productivity and look after its image.
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common among students, when
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people
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that the purposes of
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degrees
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consist to
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get
more opportunities in the future, others argue that university education is advantageous for graduates
as well
as
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companies
. In my opinion, I believe that
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good
knowledge is the key to success for all.

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important
,
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salary
are reserved
for
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studies, in other meaning each
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position
demand a specific level of training, the degree request to be a director is not the same as for an operator.
For example
, an employee with
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good
experience can’t
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get
a
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good
salary or access to a manager
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if he doesn’t have an adequate diploma.
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that
is why university schooling is essential.

In the other hand, the trend of selecting candidates with high-level education is common among recruiters, it’s
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important
for a
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company
to have a qualified staff for
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many
reasons. The
first
one is through skilled workers
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companies
are looking for boosting their productivity
as well
as their creativity. Adding to that the number of graduates and their level gives a
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high
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position
for the society in the market
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because
more the employees are competent more collaborators trust the
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company
.
For instance
,
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some
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companies
as Cervical group in Algeria open their
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own
institute and train their future employees in
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different
fields.

To conclude
, it’s obvious that
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education level open doors and give more chance to
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get
a decent job with a
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good
salary,
however
,
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companies
also
benefit from this,
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high
educated team attract more partners’.
Personally
, I
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think
that university studies are advantageous for both. It
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helps
individuals to held
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high
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the employer to
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improve
their productivity and look after its image.
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IELTS essay Some people say that the aim of university education is to get good job in the future, however others think that it benefits both graduates and companies. discuss both views and give your opinion

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317 words
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