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Some people say that in our modern age, it is unnecessary to teach children about the skills of handwriting. v.4

Some people say that in our modern age, it is unnecessary to teach children about the skills of handwriting. v. 4
Handwriting skills involve craftsmanship, artistic way of presenting letters and require a great deal of time and practice. Since students are more likely to type rather than write on a paper for the rest of their life, I do not believe that this skill is prevalent in this modern era where computers are used both in the academic and professional arenas. To begin with, neat handwriting was a criterion for academic success in the past, but not anymore in this digital era. Assignments, classwork, tests and other school activities are mostly done on computers and this is why a student needs to grasp the skills of computing and typing more than presenting immaculate letter formations on a paper. To illustrate an example, I  submitted three assignments during my last term and all of them were submitted to my teachers' emails, and not a single one was handwritten. Besides, time invested in honing excellent handwriting can be better utilised in mastering more important subjects and skills. Moreover, the use of computers and the Internet in offices is a common trend. An employee is expected to be an expert computer user, and immaculate handwriting is not a requirement to be hired by a company. Ironically, better penmanship has little value in a world surrounded by technology. Considering the future, when computers would be more predominant, parents and teachers should focus more on teaching technology to students than instructing how much a letter should be stressed or curved! To conclude, academic activities and professional needs, in this era of technology, compel students to have skills in computers and this is why it would be more practical to enhance their technical skills rather than handwriting skills- which has already become less important.
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involve craftsmanship, artistic way of presenting letters and require a great deal of time and practice. Since
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students
are more likely to type
rather
than write on a paper for the rest of their life, I do not believe that this
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skill
is prevalent in this modern era where computers are
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used
both in the academic and professional arenas.

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begin
with, neat
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was a criterion for academic success in the past,
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not
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in this digital era. Assignments, classwork,
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tests
and other school activities are
mostly
done on computers and this is why a
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student
needs to grasp the
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skills
of computing and typing more than presenting immaculate letter formations on a paper. To illustrate an example, I
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submitted three assignments during my last term and all of them
were submitted
to my teachers' emails, and not a single one was handwritten.
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, time invested in honing excellent
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handwriting
can be better
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in mastering more
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important
subjects and
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skills
.

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, the
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use
of computers and the Internet in offices is a common trend. An employee is
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expected
to be an expert computer user, and immaculate
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handwriting
is not a requirement to
be hired
by a
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company
.
Ironically
, better penmanship has
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little
value in a world surrounded by technology. Considering the future, when computers would be more predominant, parents and teachers should focus more on teaching technology to
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students
than instructing how much a letter should be
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stressed
or curved!

To conclude
, academic activities and professional needs, in this era of technology, compel
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students
to have
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skills
in computers and this is why it would be more practical to enhance their technical
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skills
rather
than
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handwriting
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skills-
which has already become less
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important
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that in our modern age, it is unnecessary to teach children about the skills of handwriting. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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