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Some people get into debt by buying things they don't need or can't afford. What are the reasons for this behaviour? What action can be taken to prevent people from having this problem?

Some people get into debt by buying things they don't need or can't afford. What are the reasons for this behaviour? What action can be taken to prevent people from having this problem? OV6W3
In today's time, new inventions in science is used more to keep an eye on its users personal day to day details. Moreover, the clients are not informed about the same and that they are being watched continuously. Also, most of these are done using the latest reforms of technology. Which is unacceptable. This essay will provide a clear insight as to why technology cannot be accepted as the 'peeping Tom' of the modern times. Earlier, during the not so modernized period of telecommunication, people had lesser concerns regarding privacy issues. However, the more complex gadgets became, the more complicated the nets of lies spun. In addition, people were less interested in knowing the technical details as much of the changes were new to them. However, today it is important to safeguard one's private life as it has become very easy to cause harm. For example, a recent article in the Times of India, reported harm caused to a women by a group of boys who were able to hack her cellphone and trace her whereabouts. As a result of this easy access, many lives are endangered and many people feel watched watched all the time. However, if stricter rules are made against privacy violation by the government much of this can be resolved. Secondly, it has been seen that accepting privacy agreements in an unavoidable dilema as most of the gadgets and softwares do not function without them. In consequence, if ever there is a question raised, the privacy agreement prevents any further harm to the offenders. Therefore, eliminating such conflicting consensus is mandatory. For instance, in the US, there was a lawsuit against the company 'Facebook' for flouting privacy terms and the verdict resulted in them having to make reforms to the terms. Hence, such strict action can prevent violation of our privacy. In conclusion, it can be said that technology is like a double-edged sword and should be used only in the benefit of the consumer and not for trespassing on them.
In
today
's time, new inventions in science is
used
more to
keep
an eye on its users personal
day to day
details
.
Moreover
, the clients are not informed about the same and that they are being
watched
continuously
.
Also
, most of these
are done
using the latest reforms of technology. Which is unacceptable. This essay will provide a
clear
insight as to why technology cannot be
accepted
as the 'peeping Tom' of the modern times.

Earlier, during the not
so
modernized period of telecommunication,
people
had lesser concerns regarding privacy issues.
However
, the more complex gadgets became, the more complicated the nets of lies spun.
In addition
,
people
were less interested in knowing the technical
details
as much of the
changes
were new to them.
However
,
today
it is
important
to safeguard one's private life as it has become
very
easy to cause harm.
For example
, a recent article in
the Times of India
, reported harm caused to a
women
by a group of boys who were able to hack her cellphone and trace her whereabouts.
As a result
of this easy access,
many
lives
are endangered
and
many
people
feel
watched
watched
all the time.
However
, if stricter
rules
are made
against privacy violation by the
government
much of this can
be resolved
.
Secondly
, it has been
seen
that accepting privacy agreements in an unavoidable
dilema
as most of the gadgets and
softwares
do not function without them. In consequence, if ever there is a question raised, the privacy agreement
prevents
any
further
harm to the offenders.
Therefore
, eliminating such conflicting consensus is mandatory.
For instance
, in the US, there was a lawsuit against the
company
'Facebook' for flouting privacy terms and the verdict resulted in them having to
make
reforms to the terms.
Hence
, such strict action can
prevent
violation of our privacy.
In conclusion
, it can
be said
that technology is like a double-edged sword and should be
used
only
in the benefit of the consumer and not for trespassing on them.
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IELTS essay Some people get into debt by buying things they don't need or can't afford. What are the reasons for this behaviour? What action can be taken to prevent people from having this problem?

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335 words
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