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Some people feel entertainers are paid too much money do you agree or disagree?

Some people feel entertainers are paid too much money BMGJa

A number of people advocate that salaries of entertainers are higher than other professions. I agree and also disagree with it. One nuance that should be taken into consideration is the fact that, on the one hand, they have innate talent in those skills which make them special. On the other hand their lives are on blast and every actions of them snapshotted by paparazzi. As a result they are more prone to get higher incomes. How ever, some of them became popular just by their scandals. For example selena gomez before dating Justin wasn't fabulous. Engineers have to study for 6 years while most of the entertainers became popular in one night. In the contray, other professions have less salaries so stars should pay lower. In conclusion, I elucidated my viewpoint with following arguments. In some cases this statement is true but the other cases it isn't.

A number of This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 advocate that salaries of entertainers are higher than You use this word too often, consider replacing it withnewalternativemore
other
 professions. I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquiesce
agree
 and also
 disagree with it.

One nuance that should be taken
 into consideration is the fact that, on the one hand, they have innate talent in those This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :proficiencies
skills
 which This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 them special. On the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withnewalternativemore
other
 hand their This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :resides
lives
 are on blast and every The noun should be probably in the singular form: "action"?action
actions
 of them Possible spelling mistake found.snaps hottedsnapshot ted
snapshotted
 by paparazzi. “As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
 a result they are more prone to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 higher incomes.

Did you mean "however"?However
How ever
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 of them became popular This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
 by their scandals. For example
Possible spelling mistake found.SelenaElenaHelenaSerenaSelina
selena
Possible spelling mistake found.GomezGómez
gomez
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
 dating Justin wasn't fabulous. Engineers This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ought to
have to
 study for 6 years while most of the entertainers became popular in one night. In the Possible spelling mistake found.contrarycontracon traycont raycontra y
contray
, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withnewalternativemore
other
 professions have Did you mean "fewer"? The noun salaries is countable.fewer
less
 salaries This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 stars should pay lower.

In conclusion
, I elucidated my viewpoint with following arguments. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
In
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 cases this statement is true This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withnewalternativemore
other
 cases it isn't. 