Search
Tools
Listening
Reading
1. Academic
2. General
Writing
1. IELTSWriting Checker
2. IELTS Writing Samples
Speaking

Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.

Some people believe the benefits of tourism outweigh the problems it creates in a particular place. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe the benefits of tourism outweigh the problems it creates in a particular place. 0Dpq

During the last few decades, tourism has became one of the biggest industries in the world, which worth is probably measured in billiones. We have witnessed a huge increase in number of tourists on one hand, and consequently, resorts, hotels and toures on the other. Although this type of business carries a number of disadvantages, some people argue that, however, there are more advantages than negative effects. Firstly and most clearly, the benefit of tourism is rise in income that comes from the tourists. By spending money in certain place, tourists can impact the country’s funds, which will lead to an opportunity for further investment in significant areas. On other hand, growing number of travellers in one place can affect the prices of goods and services. If more people come to certain cities and resorts, the costs will, thereby, go up. The view that people who travel can meet new cultures, is gaining more popularity. This is simply a consequence of a new, multicultural world we are living in. The more we experience other cultures, the more we appreciate them and therefore, it could lead to a decrease in stereotypes and racism. However, travelling by plane, car or boat can further affect global warming. Due to globalisation, the amount of air and water pollution is soaring, thereby making a number of environmental problems. Finally, tourists who buy food or souvenirs affect not only the nation’s funds, but also local businesses. Thanks to them, locals can run their shops, restaurants, bars and cafes. Although I sympathize with this view, foreign people can also ruin places and heritage sites. Beside that, they often litter, sometimes without knowledge, making the domestic people living there, suffer. In conclusion, it is obvious that tourism industry has a number of disadvantages, but in my opinion, benefits can outweight this. By this being said, it is important to remember how to preserve local sites, wild beaches or even streets, in order to balance out the positive and negative sides.

During the last few decades, tourism has Use past participle here: "become".become
became
 one of the biggest industries in the world, which worth is probably
 measured in Possible spelling mistake. Did you mean "billions", the plural form of the noun 'billion'?billionsbillion es
billiones
. We have witnessed a huge increase in You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsumtotalfigurestatistic
number
 of You use this word too often, consider replacing it withvisitorsightseertraveler
tourists
 on one hand, and consequently
, resorts, hotels and Possible spelling mistake. Did you mean "tours", the plural form of the noun 'tour'?tourstouredTorrestour es
toures
 on the other. Although this type of business carries a You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsumtotalfigurestatistic
number
 of disadvantages, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 argue that, however
, there are more advantages than This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:adverse
negative
 effects.

Firstly
 and most clearly
, the benefit of tourism is rise in income that This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :approachesarrives
comes
 from the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withvisitorsightseertraveler
tourists
. By spending money in certain place, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withvisitorsightseertraveler
tourists
 can impact the country’s funds, which will lead to an opportunity for further
 investment in significant areas. On other hand, growing You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsumtotalfigurestatistic
number
 of Possible spelling mistake found.travelers
travellers
 in one place can affect the prices of This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :productscommoditiesmerchandises
goods
 and services. If more You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :approacharrive
come
 to certain cities and resorts, the costs will, thereby, go up.

The view that You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 who travel can This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :attain
meet
 new cultures, is gaining more popularity. This is simply
 a consequence of a new, multicultural world we are living in. The more we experience other cultures, the more we appreciate them and therefore
, it could lead to a decrease in stereotypes and racism. However
, travelling by This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:aircraft
plane
, car or boat can further
 affect global warming. Due to Possible spelling mistake. 'globalisation' is British English.globalization
globalisation
, the amount of air and water pollution is soaring, thereby making a You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsumtotalfigurestatistic
number
 of environmental problems.

Finally
, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withvisitorsightseertraveler
tourists
 who This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :purchase
buy
 food or souvenirs affect not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 the nation’s funds, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
also
 local businesses. Thanks to them, locals can run their shops, restaurants, bars and 'cafes' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "cafés"cafés
cafes
. Although I sympathize with this view, foreign You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 can also
 ruin places and heritage sites. Beside that, they This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:frequently
often
 litter, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :in some instances
sometimes
 without knowledge, making the domestic You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 living there, suffer.

In conclusion
, it is obvious that tourism industry has a You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsumtotalfigurestatistic
number
 of disadvantages, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 in my opinion, benefits can Possible spelling mistake found.outweighoutweighsout weight
outweight
 this. By this being said
, it is This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:vitalcriticalessential
important
 to remember how to preserve local sites, wild beaches or even streets, in order to balance out the This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:beneficial
positive
 and This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:adverse
negative
 sides. 