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Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences.

Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. qpGd
Whenever there is a question related to visit to another nation, there are divided opinions. Few are of the viewpoint that, the foreign visitors should adopt the new culture and try to behave the same as locals; however, others says that the destination country must give welcoming behavior to foreign visitors and accepts them as they are. Therefore, ahead of my preference both the viewpoint must be discussed. If one does not follow local customs, he/she may not be taken warmly by people of that country. Due to this reason, I believe that everybody who visits other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Beside this, local customs and behaviour are mostly regulated by the religion of the country which is very sensitive to most people. That is why I agree with the view of following local customs and behaviour. In the other hand, there are many reasons to agree with the second view that the host country should welcome cultural differences. It is universally true that the civilisation is evolving from the beginning of mankind and the main reason behind this is that people are travelling from one place to another to explore the world which brings new cultures to new places. If one fails to welcome cultural differences, he/she will not be able to cope with cultures of other countries. This will impact the economy in terms of tourism and modernization as well as evaluation of civilisation. A good example of welcoming cultural differences is Malaysia. People of western countries are travelling to Malaysia and most of them are not used to follow local customs and being a Muslim country, Malaysia also providing freedom to visitors until laws are broken. Malaysia has become an example for other countries to welcome cultural differences. That is why cultural differences should always be welcomed until it hurts your philosophy or religion.
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are divided
opinions. Few are of the viewpoint that, the foreign visitors should adopt the new culture and try to behave the same as
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locals
;
however
, others says that the destination
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country
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must
give welcoming behavior to foreign visitors and accepts them as they are.
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must
be discussed
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local
customs, he/she may not
be taken
warmly
by
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people
of that
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country
. Due to this reason, I believe that everybody who visits
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other
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countries
should follow
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local
customs and
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behaviour
. Beside this,
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customs and
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are
mostly
regulated by the religion of the
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country
which is
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sensitive to most
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people
.
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why I
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agree
with the view of following
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customs and
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behaviour
.

In the
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hand, there are
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reasons to
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agree
with the second view that the host
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country
should welcome
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cultural
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differences
. It is
universally
true that the
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civilisation
is evolving from the beginning of mankind and the main reason behind this is that
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people
are travelling from one place to another to explore the world which brings new cultures to new places. If one fails to welcome
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cultural
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differences
, he/she will not be able to cope with cultures of
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other
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countries
. This will impact the economy in terms of tourism and modernization
as well
as evaluation of
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civilisation
.

A
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example of welcoming
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cultural
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differences
is Malaysia.
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People
of western
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countries
are travelling to Malaysia and most of them are not
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used
to follow
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local
customs and being a Muslim
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country
, Malaysia
also
providing freedom to visitors until laws
are broken
. Malaysia has become an example for
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other
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countries
to welcome
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cultural
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differences
.
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why
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cultural
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differences
should always
be welcomed
until it hurts your philosophy or religion.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
310 words
6.0
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