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Some people believe that there are too choices for people.

Some people believe that there are too choices for people. XGlXg
As result of being contemporary, there are a lot of opportunities for population which is said by people with modern outlook. I can accept this statement and I am going make an attempt to elucidate my choice with specific reasons and examples united with my experience. Looking considerably at informations which includes many reasons, one of them is that there are many choices for all of things. If people want to study abroad, always they can do it freely. All opportunities are coming from development. Therefore I would say that it is a great that residents and others can go to shopping centers and choose something which looks beautiful. Naturally, according to people who live during old evolution times, the generation of women have not helpful atmosphere as our living days who could not study or work. To take my grandmother as an example who couldn't work anywhere until being independent. Taking everything into consideration, my absymal opinion is that when people have a lot of choice for everything namely choosing job, accommodation and I should say that all things ought to have norm.
As result of being contemporary, there are
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a lot of
opportunities for population which
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people
with modern outlook. I can accept this
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statement and
I am going
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make
an attempt to elucidate my choice with specific reasons and examples united with my experience.

Looking
considerably
at
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informations
which includes
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many
reasons, one of them is that there are
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many
choices for
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all of things
. If
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people
want to study abroad, always they can do it
freely
. All opportunities are coming from development.
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Therefore
I would say that it is a great that residents
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and others
can go to shopping centers and choose something which looks
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beautiful
.

Naturally
, according to
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people
who
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live
during
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old
evolution times, the generation of women have not helpful atmosphere as our living days who could not study or work. To take my grandmother as an example who couldn't work anywhere until being independent.

Taking everything into consideration, my
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absymal
opinion is that when
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people
have
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a lot of
choice for everything
namely
choosing job, accommodation and I should say that all things ought to have norm.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that there are too choices for people.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
184 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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