Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Experience is playing the significant role for becoming successful person because experience is the part of life ease. Some people think that adults ought to require volunteer job in community in free time and it is useful for teenagers as community. I partially agree with given statement. To begin, some people think that student have to do unpaid work in free community in their free time. This is beneficial for them as well as community. If student have time enough to work in community and charity for volunteer work, it is good for them because teenagers learn experience in work. In order to get something new experience, students have to do free work is sine-qua-non. They have enough knowledge to survive in future easily in work. Moreover, students help in community, so they help in some other places such as beach cleaning; party decoration and food provide. For instance, last recent survey of COT-community organise trust, charity trust has been being helped by many teenagers in their free time. In addition, according to Hindu newspaper, the numbers of student can live their life easily by means of experience in unpaid work in community. On other hand, other people think that if teenager will do only free work in past time, so they might distract toward their own study. Some students do not like to study always and other students have to do job or work for paying their fee in college or school. Concerning those such things, students do not have to do volunteer work rather than paid work. Some students live in foreign country lonely so as to do paid work. For exemplify, recently survey shows that more than 50% students, they have been working paid work in foreign country for paying their fees. More, PEH- parents education help centre, they told that some student only focused on work rather than their study, consequently, the bad impact on their study so they are not attending lecture a well. To conclude, teenagers have to do some free activity or work in their free time at community and trust. However, it is depending on the circumstances of students if they want to do volunteer work, they should do that so that way it benefits for both student and trust.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Experience
is playing the significant role for becoming successful person
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
experience
is the part of life
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ease
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that adults ought to require
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
volunteer
job in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
community
in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
free
Use a comma before ‘and’ if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
time and
it is useful for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teenagers
as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
community
. I
partially
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
statement.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
do unpaid
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
free
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
community
in their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
free
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
. This is beneficial for them
as well
as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
community
. If
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
have
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
community
and charity for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
volunteer
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
, it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
for them
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teenagers
learn
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
experience
in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
. In order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
something new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
experience
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
do
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
free
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
is sine-qua-non. They have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
knowledge to survive in future
easily
in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
.
Moreover
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
community
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
places such as beach cleaning; party decoration and food provide.
For instance
, last recent survey of COT-community
Possible spelling mistake. ‘organise’ is British English.
organise
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trust
, charity
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trust
has been being
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helped
by
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teenagers
in their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
free
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
.
In addition
, according to Hindu newspaper, the numbers of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
their life
easily
by means of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
experience
in unpaid
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
in community.

On
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
hand,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that if
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teenager
will do
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
free
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
in past
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
they might distract toward their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
study
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
do not like to
The adverb ‘always’ is usually put before the verb ‘study’.
study always
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
do job or
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
for paying their fee in college or school. Concerning those such things,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
do not
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
do
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
volunteer
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
rather
than paid
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in foreign country lonely
‘So as to’ expresses purpose and is used in formal texts. Consider using “to”
so as to
do
After the auxiliary verb ‘do’, use the base form of a verb. Did you mean “pay”?
paid
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
. For exemplify, recently survey
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
that more than 50%
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
, they have been working paid
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
in foreign country for paying their fees. More,
Possible spelling mistake found.
PEH
- parents education
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
Possible spelling mistake. ‘centre’ is British English.
centre
, they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
told
that
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
focused on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
rather
than their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
study
,
consequently
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
impact on their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
study
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
they are not attending lecture a well.

To conclude
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teenagers
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
do
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
free
activity or
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
in their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
free
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
at
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
community
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trust
.
However
,
In formal speech, it is preferable to avoid the progressive form in this case.
it is depending on
the circumstances of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
if they want to do
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
volunteer
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
, they should do that
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that way it benefits for both
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trust
.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
378 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts