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Some people believe that technology has made maan more sociable. To what extent do you agree ar diagree.

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Technology has been revolutionizing the world, be it a wheel in the past or internet in this millennia. It is argued that man has become more social than before by using technology, I disagree. This essay will outline how computers and applications have restricted the movement of persons and also effect of using them for extended duration along with relevant examples. The need for an individual to move out and mingle with others has reduced drastically. The social clubs are replaced by virtual groups on networking sites and usual chit-chat with multiple messenger apps. With entertainment available at their fingertips, people refuse to go back to traditional ways such as playing in a ground resulting in closure of playgrounds and parks. It is more of a system to human interaction than a physical one. To illustrate this, an oxford university survey found that 70% of businesses would prefer an interview of a candidate over skype of VOIP instead of having them drop by. Therefore it is conclusively clear that being able to talk with others by their phones or on social media, people refuse to come out and meet other physically unless in an unavoidable situation and it is extended to the organizations as well. Secondly, modern day provides more options consequently effecting one’s choices and preferences to spend their time. The kids growing up spend more amount of screen time thus hampering their social skills. For instance, it has been observed that restricting the usage of mobiles and ipads at a summer camp enabled the pupils to interact more with their fellow mates. Thus it is possible to state that use of devices reduces the interactive skills in children. To conclude, despite its use to improve the communication by erasing the distances, I have a opinion that technology impairs the social skills of a human by making their life comfortable, easier and also gluing them to devices and negating any sort of interaction with the outside world
Technology has been revolutionizing the world, be it a wheel in the past or internet in
this
millennia. It
is argued
that
man
has become more
social
than
before
by using technology, I disagree. This essay will outline how computers and applications have restricted the movement of persons and
also
effect of using them for extended duration along with relevant examples.

The need for an individual to
move
out and mingle with others has
reduced
drastically
. The
social
clubs
are replaced
by virtual groups on networking sites and usual chit-chat with multiple messenger apps. With entertainment available at their fingertips,
people
refuse to go back to traditional ways such as playing in a ground resulting in closure of playgrounds and parks. It is more of a system to human interaction than a physical one. To illustrate this, an oxford university survey found that 70% of businesses would prefer an interview of a candidate over skype of
VOIP
instead
of having them drop by.
Therefore
it is
conclusively
clear
that being able to talk with others by their phones or on
social
media,
people
refuse to
come
out and
meet
other
physically
unless in an unavoidable situation and it
is extended
to the organizations
as well
.

Secondly
, modern day provides more options
consequently
effecting one’s choices and preferences to spend their time. The kids growing up spend more amount of screen time
thus
hampering their
social
skills
.
For instance
, it has
been observed
that restricting the usage of mobiles and
ipads
at a summer camp enabled the pupils to interact more with their fellow mates.
Thus
it is possible to state that
use
of devices
reduces
the interactive
skills
in children.

To conclude
, despite its
use to
improve
the communication by erasing the distances, I have
a
opinion that technology impairs the
social
skills
of a human by making their life comfortable, easier and
also
gluing them to devices and negating any sort of interaction with the outside world
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IELTS essay Some people believe that technology has made maan more sociable.

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4 paragraphs
327 words
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