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Some people believe that starting school at an earlier age is very beneficial for children, while others believe that children must stay home and attend to school at the age of seven

Some people believe that starting school at an earlier age is very beneficial for children, while others believe that children must stay home and attend to school at the age of seven 3ax5n
Growing up and being educated young generation is important consideration and difficult proccess. Most people encourage their childrento begin studying at school while they are 5 or 6 years old. I do not agree this idea because infants mind are not match to involve more information about science and academic comprehension. To commence with, When parents compel children to study at school at early age, they may lose their childhood. Moreover children untill six or seven age should spend more time with their family members and friends at kindergarten. Hence, their attending school at early age, regularly being busy with educational homework children come across some problems such as mental or moral stress or get tired of doing the same job and a large number of parents worry about infants indifference to school. On the other hand, parents always responsible for childrens life and their education. So they motivate infants to widen their overview about the world. They should identify infant's ability and talent which are relate to music, sport or specific subject. Also, they must direct childrens capacity. if the children has academic ability, this will manifest itself as the child develops and does not need to be forced at an early age. For example: Alisher Navoiy who was great poet. When he was 4 years old, he learned by heart Mantik ut-tayr book. Furthermore Mozart was an infant prodigy and he learned to compose music at an early age. To sum up, I think children are pure hearted and we should give a chance them to live free during their childhood. Because acquiring academic skills with infants is not succesful and beneficial way to produce a balanced personality.
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being educated
young generation is
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proccess
. Most
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people
encourage their
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childrento
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begin
studying at school while they are 5 or 6 years
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. I do not
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agree
this
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idea
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because
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infants
mind are not match to involve more information about science and academic comprehension.

To commence with, When parents compel
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children
to study at school at
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early
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age
, they may lose their childhood.
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Moreover
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children
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untill
six or seven
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age
should spend more time with their family members and friends at kindergarten.
Hence
, their attending school at
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early
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age
,
regularly
being busy with educational homework
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children
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come
across
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some
problems such as mental or moral
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stress
or
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get
tired of doing the same job and
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a large number of
parents worry about
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infants
indifference to school.

On the other hand
, parents always responsible for
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childrens
life and their education.
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So
they motivate
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infants
to widen their overview about the world. They should identify infant's ability and talent which are
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relate
to music, sport or specific subject.
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, they
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must
direct
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childrens
capacity.
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if
the
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children
has academic ability, this will manifest itself as the child develops and does not need to
be forced
at an
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early
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age
.
For example
:
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Alisher
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Navoiy
who was great poet. When he was 4 years
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old
, he learned by heart
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Mantik
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ut-tayr
book.
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Furthermore
Mozart was an
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infant
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prodigy and
he learned to compose music at an
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early
age.

To sum up, I
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think
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children
are pure
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hearted and
we should give a chance them to
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live
free during their childhood.
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Because
acquiring academic
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skills
with
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infants
is not
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succesful
and beneficial way to produce a balanced personality.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that starting school at an earlier age is very beneficial for children, while others believe that children must stay home and attend to school at the age of seven

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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