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Some people believe that parents should give money to children who help with housework (cleaning, dish washing) to encourage them to help, while other people think children should help with being unpaid.

Some people believe that parents should give money to children who help with housework (cleaning, dish washing) to encourage them to help, while other people think children should help with being unpaid. do3Jp
The topic of getting paid by doing housework has been controversial. Some people believe that parents should give money to children who help with housework (cleaning, dish washing) to encourage them to help, whereas I agree with those who think that children should help with being unpaid. On the one hand, it is commonly believed that parents should give money to children who help with housework (cleaning, dish washing) to encourage them to help. One of the most important reasons is that this is one of the effective methods to teach children since in order to encourage them to be a tidy person that they can help themselves in the future. For example, according to the latest survey conducted by Bangkok University, it revealed that money can be used as a teaching tool of the financial responsibility. Having said that money plays a major role in encouraging children to do housework. On the other hand, it seems to me that children should help with being unpaid. The most significant reason is the face that children can help other people and be responsible for themselves voluntary. This is because in the future, they will help other people without benefit and become responsible citizens. To illustrate this, in recent news, it has been reported that parents should delegate housework to each child; for example the eldest child should be responsible for doing the dishes while the rest ought to do the vacuuming. I agree with this point because housework is everyone’s duty. In conclusion, having considered both sides of this issue, although parents should give money to children who help with housework, I agree with those who think that children should help with being unpaid.
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children
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(cleaning, dish washing) to encourage them to
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with being unpaid.

On the one hand, it is
commonly
believed that
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parents
should give
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money
to
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children
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who
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help
with
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housework
(cleaning, dish washing) to encourage them to
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. One of the most
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important
reasons is that this is one of the effective methods to teach
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children
since in order to encourage them to be a tidy person that they can
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help
themselves in the future.
For example
, according to the latest survey conducted by Bangkok University, it revealed that
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money
can be
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used
as a teaching tool of the financial responsibility. Having said that
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money
plays a major role in encouraging
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children
to do housework.

On the other hand
, it seems to me that
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children
should
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help
with being unpaid. The most significant reason is the face that
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children
can
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help
other
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people
and be responsible for themselves voluntary. This is
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because
in the future, they will
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other
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people
without benefit and become responsible citizens. To illustrate this, in recent news, it has
been reported
that
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parents
should delegate
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housework
to each child;
for example
the eldest child should be responsible for doing the dishes while the rest ought to do the vacuuming. I
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agree
with this point
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because
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housework
is everyone’s duty.

In conclusion
, having considered both sides of this issue, although
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parents
should give
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money
to
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children
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who
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help
with
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housework
, I
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agree
with those
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think
that
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children
should
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help
with being unpaid.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that parents should give money to children who help with housework (cleaning, dish washing) to encourage them to help, while other people think children should help with being unpaid.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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