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Some people believe that once a person becomes a criminal, he will always be a criminal. Do you agree with this statement? Provide specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Some people believe that once a person becomes a criminal, he will always be a criminal. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. 56L0e
When the prisoners have fulfilled their conviction, the government will let them freed. However, many inhabitants said that although prisoners have been freed, they will still have a chance to commit some criminals. This essay firmly does not agree with this notion and will state the reasons. To begin with, the primary reason why ex-prisoners will not commit any violence is that their heart is full of the feel of regretful. According to some research, missing their family is the most significant pressure for the prisoners. Because some of them probably think that their families will not receive them again. Furthermore, the prisoners will not want to taste the ambiance of prison again because their surroundings are full of criminals. Thus, come back to penitentiary is the worst thing for the criminals. Moreover, a decision from the government cannot be in vain by the criminals. People who have been in the cell for the second time will get a more stringent punishment rather than formerly. Therefore, they will not commit any criminals again and start to think about some jobs that are sufficient for them. For smart prisoners, they will utilize their time in jail to plan what they want to do when they are free. Thus, it is not impossible for a prisoner to become a rich man with a good job. In conclusion, although there are some ex-prisoners still do bratty things, the chance for the criminals to change is more leading because they do not want to humiliate their family and got a lengthy penitential time again.
When the
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prisoners
have fulfilled their conviction, the
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government
will
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let
them freed.
However
,
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many
inhabitants said that although
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prisoners
have
been freed
, they will
still
have a chance to commit
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some
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criminals
. This essay
firmly
does not
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agree
with this notion and will state the reasons.

To
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begin
with, the primary reason why ex-prisoners will not commit any violence is that their heart is full of the feel of regretful. According to
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some
research, missing their family is the most significant pressure for the
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prisoners
.
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Because
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some
of them
probably
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think
that their families will not receive them
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again
.
Furthermore
, the
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prisoners
will not want to taste the ambiance of prison
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again
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because
their surroundings are full of
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criminals
.
Thus
,
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come
back to penitentiary is the worst thing for the criminals.

Moreover
, a decision from the
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government
cannot be in vain by the
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criminals
.
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People
who have been in the cell for the second time will
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get
a more stringent punishment
rather
than
formerly
.
Therefore
, they will not commit any
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criminals
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again
and
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start
to
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think
about
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some
jobs that are sufficient for them. For smart
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prisoners
, they will utilize their time in jail to plan what they want to do when they are free.
Thus
, it is not impossible for a
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prisoner
to become a rich
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man
with a
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good
job.

In conclusion
, although there are
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some
ex-prisoners
still
do bratty things, the chance for the
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criminals
to
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change
is more leading
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because
they do not want to humiliate their family and
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got
a lengthy penitential time
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again
.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that once a person becomes a criminal, he will always be a criminal. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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