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Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health and diet. Others however believe that governments should make sure that their citizens have a healthy diet. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health and diet. Others however believe that governments should make sure that their citizens have a healthy diet. VmEQ
It is considered that, taking care of own health and diet ought to be main responibility of people, yet certain number of people claim that, this matter must be under control of governments. In my view, every person should control him/herself for such kind of individual issues and governments only could play supportive and enlightening role. To begin with, health issues are primarily related with food and the way of tackling them is an important part of governments' job. Hence, unhealthy nutrition or malmutrition are able to make inevitable results for people. Firstly, to produce healthy and organic food and to provide every part of the country with this food at a cheaper price should be fundamental matter for governments. Secondly, through relevant ministry of government, certain authorities ought to be assigned and interfered to prevent or dicrease trading of unhealthy junk foods and street foods. Implications of sustainable enlightenment and intervene will show its influence on people. However, as long as each individual does not take under control his own will, all efforts of government would not be meaningful. Thus, such habits as smoking cigarettes, consuming alcoholic beverages and using prohibitive drugs reflects each person's own choice. Although, governments has forbidden selling and using drug, some people still find a way to buy it. We could have say governments show no attention on people's health, if had not risen tax ranges on alcoholic drinks and cigarettes which both are main reason of serious diseases. Furthermore, not only consuming healthy food, but also doing workout properly and having frequent medical examinations are important factors that people can do themselves. In conclusion, when take into consideration that, government intervention and control on food and beverages sector, may shows variability by country, however whether living healthy life and rising life quality is up to each individual.
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health and diet ought to be main
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responibility
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people
,
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people
claim that, this matter
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must
be under
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control
of
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governments
. In my view, every person should
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control
him/herself for such kind of individual issues and
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governments
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only
could play supportive and enlightening role.

To
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begin
with, health issues are
primarily
related with
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food
and the way of tackling them is an
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important
part of
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governments
' job.
Hence
, unhealthy nutrition or
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malmutrition
are able to
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make
inevitable results for
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people
.
Firstly
, to produce healthy and organic
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food
and to provide every part of the country with this
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food
at a cheaper price should be fundamental matter for
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governments
.
Secondly
, through relevant ministry of
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government
, certain authorities ought to
be assigned
and interfered to
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prevent
or
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dicrease
trading of unhealthy junk
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foods
and street
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foods
. Implications of sustainable enlightenment and intervene will
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show
its influence on
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people
.

However
, as long as each individual does not take under
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control
his
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own
will, all efforts of
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government
would not be meaningful.
Thus
, such habits as smoking cigarettes, consuming alcoholic beverages and using prohibitive drugs reflects each person's
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own
choice. Although,
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governments
has forbidden selling and using drug,
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some
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people
still
find a way to
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buy
it. We could have say
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governments
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show
no attention on
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people
's health, if had not risen tax ranges on alcoholic drinks and cigarettes which both are main reason of serious diseases.
Furthermore
, not
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only
consuming healthy
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food
,
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but
also
doing workout
properly
and having frequent medical examinations are
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important
factors that
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people
can do themselves.

In conclusion
, when take into consideration that,
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government
intervention and
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control
on
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food
and beverages sector, may
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shows
variability by country,
however
whether living healthy life and rising life quality is up to each individual.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health and diet. Others however believe that governments should make sure that their citizens have a healthy diet.

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304 words
6.0
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