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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or valuable to be shared freely. P8Xp
There are split views available regarding sharing information. Number of individuals support that spreading knowledge about scientific innovations, business as well as education field; is beneficial for the world; however, another group think that only few vital information should be provide without any cost. If questioned, I strongly support the former view. My inclination is justified in the ensuing write-ups. On the one hand, there are various arguments which support the first point of view. The first and foremost one is that provided true information can prevent public from rumours and fake news. In other words, if any false news spread in citizens and governments clarify new by giving right information; people can not believe in those rumours. Furthermore, information may help to upgrade human in their field. By this I mean that proper knowledge can help professionals to develop their skills. For example, students of science can be up to date with latest research of any scientific topic by getting details of it from scientists. On the contrary, many people think that only few important information should be spread because of some reasons. The primary reason is that investors can generate revenue by hiding information. To illustrate, some companies have spent their money on any research; if they share information with everybody, companies can not make profit from that information. Another cause is that spreading only important facts can help to protect public from getting panicked. To simplify, many times, informations consist some dangerous truths which spread fear in public. For instance, during corona pandemic, people got afraid because of some knowledge about covid-19 virus which was provided by government. In conclusion, although hiding information can help to generate revenue; however, I firmly believe that sharing information can help to make more development in field of science and business as well as education. It also prevents people from believing in rumours.
There
are split
views available regarding sharing
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information
. Number of individuals support that spreading knowledge about scientific innovations, business
as well
as education field; is beneficial for the world;
however
, another group
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think
that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
few vital
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information
should be
Consider using the past participle "provided"?
provide
without any cost. If questioned, I
strongly
support the former view. My inclination
is justified
in the ensuing write-ups.

On the one hand, there are various arguments which support the
first
point of view. The
first
and foremost one is that provided true
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information
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
public from
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rumours
and fake news.
In other words
, if any false news spread in citizens and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
clarify new by giving right
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information
;
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people
can not believe in those
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rumours
.
Furthermore
,
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information
may
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help
to upgrade human in their field. By this I mean that proper knowledge can
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
help
professionals to develop their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
.
For example
, students of science can be up to date with
A determiner is probably missing here: "the latest".
latest
research of any scientific topic by getting
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
of it from scientists.

On the contrary
,
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many
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people
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think
that
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only
few
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important
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information
should
be spread
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because
of
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some
reasons. The primary reason is that investors can generate revenue by hiding
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information
. To illustrate,
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some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
have spent their money on any research; if they share
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information
with everybody,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
can not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
profit from that
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information
. Another cause is that spreading
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only
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
facts can
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help
to protect public from getting panicked. To simplify,
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many
times,
The word 'informations' is a legal term. In standard English, the word 'information' is a non-count noun. Did you mean "information"?
informations
consist
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some
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dangerous
truths which spread fear in public.
For instance
, during corona pandemic,
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
afraid
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of
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some
knowledge about
Did you mean "COVID-19" or the alternative spelling "Covid-19" (= coronavirus)?
covid-19
virus which
was provided
by
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government
.

In conclusion
, although hiding
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information
can
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
help
to generate revenue;
however
, I
firmly
believe that sharing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
can
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
help
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
more development in field of science and business
as well
as education. It
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevents
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
from believing in
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rumours
.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or valuable to be shared freely.

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