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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research ,business and the academic world. Other believe that some information is too important or valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Other believe that some information is too important or valuable to be shared freely. DlV1j
Some acknowledges that exchange of information in education area, business industries and scientific researches if beneficial as people can overcome their doubts. While, other disputes this belief that some information should be confidential to ourselves in a light of fact that the competitor companies may plagiarize some important data. This essay will discuss detailed information with examples of mention reasons. Solving doubt becomes ease when people have knowledge. As by sharing concepts with others, can improve level of knowledge and doubt can be solved precisely and perfectly. Moreover, in academic world, if students will interchange their knowledge or solve problems together, it would be helpful to understand the facts. I asserts that employers should share their thoughts or ideas with their colleague, thus they can evolve their work effectively. For instance, the subject mathematics, by solving maths problem in group, than students can ensure their methods to solve the problems. Conversely, some advocates that some information should be not exchange as the competitors can copy that ideas. There are companies which can not reveal their numerous information to the outsiders, resulting the copyright case for other industries. Hence, this affects their whole business. Furthermore, also students in examination can not share data, otherwise they will get less marks or might get punished. For example, a recent study found that 40% of businesses get stuck as they copied the data from other companies. In my opinion, it might be positive trend to share knowledge with other as it alleviates the doubts. However, some useful information should be confidential. To conclude, it is claimed that exchanging facts can overcome doubts of people. while, it is undisputed that some information can not be shared because opposite parties can steal that ideas.
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acknowledges that exchange of
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information
in education area, business industries and scientific researches if beneficial as
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people
can overcome their
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doubts
.
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While
,
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other
disputes this belief that
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some
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information
should be confidential to ourselves in a light of fact that the competitor
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companies
may plagiarize
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some
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important
data. This essay will discuss detailed
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information
with examples of mention reasons.

Solving
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doubt
becomes
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ease
when
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people
have
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knowledge
. As by sharing concepts with others, can
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improve
level of
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knowledge
and
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doubt
can
be solved
precisely
and
perfectly
.
Moreover
, in academic world, if students will interchange their
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knowledge
or solve problems together, it would be helpful to understand the facts. I
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asserts
that employers should share their thoughts or
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ideas
with their colleague,
thus
they can evolve their work
effectively
.
For instance
, the subject mathematics, by solving
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maths
problem in group, than students can ensure their methods to solve the problems.

Conversely
,
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some
advocates that
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some
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information
should be not
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exchange
as the competitors can copy that
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ideas
. There are
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companies
which can not reveal their numerous
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information
to the outsiders, resulting the copyright case for
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other
industries.
Hence
, this affects their whole business.
Furthermore
,
also
students in examination can not share data,
otherwise
they will
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get
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less
marks or might
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get
punished.
For example
, a recent study found that 40% of businesses
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get
stuck as they copied the data from
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other
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companies
.

In my opinion, it might be
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positive
trend to share
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knowledge
with
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other
as it alleviates the
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doubts
.
However
,
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some
useful
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information
should be confidential.

To conclude
, it
is claimed
that exchanging facts can overcome
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doubts
of
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people
.
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while
, it
is undisputed
that
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some
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information
can not
be shared
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because
opposite parties can steal that
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ideas
.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Other believe that some information is too important or valuable to be shared freely.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
288 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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