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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Well we have been always taught by our parents to get satisfied with what ever wee got by god grace. Today also few of the population believe in the same opinion. On the contrary, their are little who think in boarder manner argue with the above statement. In my eyes, The thirst of the person should never die. On one hand our ancestors faced many struggle to achieve even a minor thing in their lives. Firstly, the had to go through may issues to make their livelihood rich with amenities and run their life in luxury way, the best manner they can. Secondly, they believed in accepting the situation they are in such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. On other hand, they made sure that their youngers should not go through the similar struggle what they went through. Moreover, they respect their time and hard work, hence they have the mentality to get satisfied in what they have and the situation they are going through right now. Since, they believe that every thing in life comes by struggle and hard work and still even today many people in the society deprived of all the facilities. However, new generation have the opine to always chase new goals of life if one is already achieved. Folks in current stage believed that thirst to follow something should never get died, as a result it may lead to become lethargic and sluggish life. In addition, the economic crisis of the country is climbing the Everest peak day by day. Hence to achieve the smooth and flexible life. It has became extremely vital to always try to improve current situation and move with the advance society. For instance, is person stopped to dream big and end with greedy nature with an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money, he/ she could not put his/ her foot forward for their personal and family development which may pull them back in this developing society. In the nutshell, it is very crucial to always greed for big even though we have achieve our basic needs. In addition, to raise up and achieve all the possible heights and designations which ever they can.
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satisfied with what ever wee
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by god grace.
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Today
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few of the population believe in the same opinion.
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are
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who
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in boarder manner argue with the above statement. In my eyes, The thirst of the person should never
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.

On one hand our ancestors faced
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many
struggle to
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achieve
even a minor thing in their
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lives
.
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, the had to go
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may issues to
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make
their livelihood rich with amenities and run their
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life
in luxury way, the best manner they can.
Secondly
, they believed in accepting the situation they are in such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. On other hand, they made sure that their
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should not go
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the similar struggle what they went
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.
Moreover
, they respect their time and
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hard
work,
hence
they have the mentality to
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get
satisfied in what they have and the situation they are going
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right
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now
. Since, they believe that every thing in
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by struggle and
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work and
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today
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many
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in the society deprived of all the facilities.

However
, new generation have
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the opine
to always chase new goals of
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life
if one is already achieved. Folks in
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current
stage believed that thirst to follow something should never
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get
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died
,
as a result
it may lead to become lethargic and sluggish
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life
.
In addition
, the economic crisis of the country is climbing the Everest peak day by day.
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to
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achieve
the smooth and flexible
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life
. It has
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extremely
vital to always try to
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improve
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current
situation and
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move
with the advance society.
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, is person
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stopped
to dream
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big
and
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end
with greedy nature with an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money, he/ she could not put his/ her foot forward for their personal and family development which may pull them back in this developing society.

In the nutshell, it is
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crucial to always greed for
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big
even though
we have
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achieve
our basic needs.
In addition
, to raise up and
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achieve
all the possible heights and designations which ever they can.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations

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  American English
4 paragraphs
366 words
6.0
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