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Some people believe that it is a good idea to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some people believe that it is a good idea to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. g2j7
Information is power, while freedom of expression is a vital feature in this modern era. According to these ideals, many feels that the future of the planet will improve by the open exchange of knowledge among all humans. While motivations for exchanging knowledge openly include the accelerated advancement of technology and the benefit of humanity, I consider that it should not be pursued without pay as information requires financing and security. Technological discoveries will be made quicker and more easily if individuals do not need financial assistance to gain the requisite expertise. There are also brilliant scientists who do not have the means to obtain valuable knowledge to complete their study. However, since the material is free, it is not an obstacle for its development. For example, cancer details can be easily accessible on the Internet, enabling physicians to come up with a pill that helps treat skin cancer and benefits patients around the world. While free information is valuable in this scenario, it is not so in all situations. Most knowledge requires payment to be made and retained. In comparison, certain varieties of data in the wrong hands can be devastating for civilization. There are many experts whose task is to generate analysis and innovative ideas. If they are not paid, they can no longer produce science. In addition, some of this study deals with risky areas, such as nuclear physics and pharmaceuticals. For instance, an act of violence happened when certain criminals were able to learn how to make bombs using free knowledge on the Internet. Clearly, this should not be permitted, and for only this reason, not all knowledge should be readily available to all. In sum, the free distribution of information can aid in some ways, but it can also be harmful to certain societies. While some agree that people should provide as much wisdom as possible, I firmly believe the contrary. People should be careful of underestimating the importance and power of information.
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Information
is power, while freedom of expression is a vital feature in this modern era. According to these ideals,
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many
feels that the future of the planet will
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improve
by the open exchange of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
knowledge
among all humans. While motivations for exchanging
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
knowledge
openly
include the accelerated advancement of technology and the benefit of humanity, I consider that it should not
be pursued
without pay as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
requires financing and security.

Technological discoveries will
be made
quicker and more
easily
if individuals do not need financial assistance to gain the requisite expertise. There are
also
brilliant scientists who do not have the means to obtain valuable
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
knowledge
to complete their study.
However
, since the material is
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
free
, it is not an obstacle for its development.
For example
, cancer
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
can be
easily
accessible on the Internet, enabling physicians to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
up with a pill that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
treat skin cancer and benefits patients around the world. While
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free
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information
is valuable in this scenario, it is not
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so
in all situations.

Most
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knowledge
requires payment to
be made
and retained.
In comparison
, certain varieties of data in the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
wrong
hands can be devastating for civilization. There are
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many
experts whose task is to generate analysis and innovative
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ideas
. If they are not paid, they can no longer produce science.
In addition
,
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some
of this study deals with risky areas, such as nuclear physics and pharmaceuticals.
For instance
, an act of violence happened when certain criminals were able to learn how to
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make
bombs using
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free
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knowledge
on the Internet.
Clearly
, this should not
be permitted
, and for
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only
this reason, not all
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knowledge
should be
readily
available to all.

In sum, the
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free
distribution of
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information
can aid in
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some
ways,
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but
it can
also
be harmful to certain societies. While
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some
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agree
that
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people
should provide as much wisdom as possible, I
firmly
believe the contrary.
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People
should be careful of underestimating the importance and power of
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information
.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is a good idea to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.

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328 words
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